Poetry Forum

Cold so cold it’s hard to breathe I’m at the graveside clutching this wreath The hole in the ground an unwelcoming sight Upturned soil and a hole big enough to swallow The whole congregation wouldn’t that be a sight Cold noses sniffling bored feet shuffling The noise of people weeping Red eyes throu...

repetition ruined it for me to (I is not the man I is)? maybe its me but that dosnt make sence to me

yeah i liked this bold imagery great write

i liked it i liked it's pace and imagery

Hi im kind to writing poetry hence wy ive joined this site to learn but i liked ending especially this part (As we lie here I know I shall not find greater peace)very well done

i liked it and your choice of words went well i thought