Poetry Forum

Hi KJ, As the simple explanation of an idea this reads well. 'Spectacle of spectacles' - sounds clumsy and lazy to me. 'foreheads with a glossy sheen / anything but aesthetic' - v. good but I would drop the -al from aesthetic and I agree with barry on the next line, which just doesn't fit in with yo...

What about echo? I once read somewhere that it was one of the most overused of cliches.

I guess this poses the inevitable question of the use of antiquated phrasing in a contemporary poem. There's a Scottish poet, Robert Crawford I believe, who does this a lot and mixes in dialect as well. I think this one would be done more justice performed than on the page. Anyone for a full stop af...

Surely a more appropriate link to the second stanza is Old father Time, no? I liked squeak of her leather chair but by compacting the images and cutting filler, phrases like 'and all', you could fit much more into this. The title is similar to 'Bookends' by Tony Harrison, have you read that? You see...

Hello hello,

another new member here so I just wanted to greet everyone and extend the tremor of a web handshake to those who congregate here.

I don't want to make a huge list of favourite writers or anything, recently I have been reading a lot of Paul Muldon't.

See you around.