Poetry Forum

:D I've already altered the ugly. unavoidable etc since this went up. All the other suggestions you made, jonesy have been covered and come later in but thanks for your time. I've done 66 pages at the moment thinking I was doing great, then realised mine's double spaced, in a book it wouldn't be so ...

I think I'll stick with the prose thread.

Hi Jonesy, I've read the first chapter and think it's really good. I will read more when I can. I love the relaxed style of writing. I should think it appeals more to men but what do I know? I'm a woman just kidding ladies.
It's sounds like a piece of real life jonesy.

I have single spaced it as suggested. As a new 'poet' I really don't feel qualified to critique someone elses work, I may give the wrong advice. I'm not clever enough. I mainly write comedy/drama and sitcoms. I have only recently started to write a novel which is also a new thing for me. Maybe I'm o...

That's a sketch

I loved this, and can't wait to read more. it keeps one gripped throughout.

I found this interesting and wanted to find out more about the story/characters but I don't understand the ...chapter 12 bit

Oh I see, I didn't read the rules I prefer juggs

Taking Shapes If only I could change the world, I’d make it square for a start. Design the trees with oblong leaves and flowers in the shape of a heart. The sun would be a diamond and the moon a cupid’s bow, shooting stars at the chevron hills and the zigzag lakes below. Pyramids of mountains too, w...

I'm not sure myself either David, it's my first novel. Thanks for your time/critique

This is the first two pages of a novel I am writing. I have nick named it Silver Lit, it's women's fiction. ...................................................... BETTER THE DEVIL YOU KNOW Chapter 1 ‘Wow, that was some story,’ thought Joan as she placed the paperback onto the coffee table. The novel...