Poetry Forum

I have to have my PC, my spell-checker and my grammar check, they write the poems all I do is beat on the keys and they put the hen scratching together –hu! Maybe I shouldn’t have told you this???

Ray, I found the meter to be rough on this one I understand it is not a sonnet but the reading of it causes me to break and buck in the longer lines and fall over the short lines. Couplets should be a little closer in foot, and line. Another problem is that I feel that after reading it a few times t...

Thank you very much, Dublin.

Friday morning I hopped out of the shower, popped over to the lavatory counter, flopped my most profound sexual characteristic down and onto a misplaced curling iron, burning the tender center of my-very-being. Thankfully Ms. Careless had left a glass of iced tea, by her torturing implement. I quick...

Thanks Dave, I will attend to the repairs.

Thank you all –very good suggestions; I will do some revision. You all have been a great help and THANK YOU!!

Oh! Have you heard a stone's grief? An inward pity shrieked in vain. It resonates beyond belief like a rose's scream under winter’s strain or crumbling of spirit by parting’s pain. Echoes of longing for inner peace the hum of want and wonder why. A ringing in ear that will never cease from a shrill ...

Ilex, it is like this not many poets get as proficient as you have with rhyme. Most feel that is as good as it gets, not so, there is 3 more levels of rhyme to master. Most start to give up on rhyme as it takes so much more work to go past this level. Ie: give everybody a break , most start writing ...

arunansu, I like this short morning peek into your love life, a good flow of words and thoughts, strong images and a sweet tone. The only thing I would suggest a change is the last line: “I become a woodwind of love.” If you could drop the love part it would read a little better (at least to me) you...

Nice rhyme, you have done well. There is a slight forced feel which does not bother me, but will some. I love rhyme and work in it myself from time to time. It is a fun way to write but we understand it is not very commercial or contemporary just a fun thing and you have done a nice job. I would thi...

Dublin, you have advance to the third level of rhyme. "Appropriate Rhyme." At this, the third level, the writer finally recognizes the most basic responsibility of the poet, that he must do at least as much as he would in prose; he must use the language proficiently, according to the laws ...

Ilex, I fear this one is suffering from a bit of forced rhyme and inconstant end rhyme. An example would be “areolite” much a stretch to fit with night seeing how it turns my spell checker red. I would also loose the rolling caps, better to keep the sentences together than cut them up by using caps ...