Poetry Forum

In response to David, i researched the Morrisey lyrics you are refering to, and i can see some parallels there. A similar style of writting or motivation i think, which isn't bad at all haha :) 'Brother Fergus' - I did try to create a 1950's feel to the poem, i wanted to create the atmosphere of an ...

Haha that is an amateur spelling mistake, its meant to be queue

Thank you, i'm rather flattered haha

I like this, i think the way the sentences are constructed (shorter sentences in some parts, not in others) creates a really nice rythum that increases the intensity and the tension within the poem itself.

I like this poem, it seems to create a really definite picture of a handicapped life for both the mother and what i am presuming is her son. It creates a good atmosphere, and my only suggestion would be to perhaps lengthen it further, although i guess that could dillute the intensity of it.

Feel good summer blockbuster. Classic us eh? Sweeping titles as camera fades to starlet's exquisite collarbone. No prime example of femininity. But everything looks swell in black and white. One boy, one girl. Small town of course. Authentic like. Queue. rain. Faces intact. You know the drill. The ...