Poetry Forum

thanks for advice man, were there any parts you did like and why, Just to see if am on the right track with a few. I know my problems is than to abstract but that’s me, from taste in music, film, cloths, artwork. I am fascinated with the absurd and surreal

Here is my revised poem. Its still contains abstraction and symbolic images but that’s the way I write. I hope this paints a better picture. Any further advice would be appreciated as I have only just started to express my self in writing and I am here to learn. I have just turned twenty and still p...

Thanks for the advice, The reason I use abstractions I don’t like telling the reader what to think, I like my shit to be more enigmatic but I suppose this can alienate the reader from any sense of purpose or relevance. I rewrite it and try to be more descriptive, paint a better picture abd let me kn...

brewing and stewing in self pity i can relate to that. The life brain is my favorite. Everybody can relate to picking on a kid a some point in your school life. And when you think back the torment you put somebody through at one on their most vulnerable times of life. And thinking what as become of ...

A short poem. Let me know what you think. Die the untimely death of my eye Filtered urban landscapes cascade by Stark images of poverty laid to waste Concealed in the depths of this esoteric place Early morning haze dissolves exposing fabric Stitched into bare wounds of a dystopian nation Punctured ...

very nice, rich and textured with vibrent Recollections of sound. Beautifully painted

Deep dark filthy twisted foul disgusting minds blistered brewing stewing in own self pity hidden while hiding truth so gritty bent distorted ravaged with thought stinking smelling of sins bought squashed rotten incapable of feeling putrid sickening no signs of healing messy dizzy searching for clari...

Very nice imaginative poem, quite abstract. Not sure of all the relevance but I quite liked the line
“With none beside it – T’is almost invisible” .

Good use of symbolism, which is relative to my mind.

Unless its poem about the quantum physics, then I got wrong

Thanks for the critique, it is true I do wallow a lot in self pity from time to time. But also write a lot of surreal and absurd poems and song lyrics.

Nice to have to some constructive criticism.

Thanks
Matt

hi, This is my first post here. My poems are very dark and macabre. I feel my best write-in comes from mundaneness of existing. I sound like a jolly chap dont I. I just find writing in a pessimistic mind set helps me to be more creative. I suffer from dyslexia, apologies for my spelling. Butter spre...