Mike,
Welcome on board, this site has given me the confidence to dip my toe in the water and the feedback (to date!) has been very constructive / informative and supportive!
Mick
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- Tue Nov 18, 2008 12:58 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1349
- Tue Nov 18, 2008 11:00 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Clerihew
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1930
Re: Clerihew
Ray, I had to look Clerihew up also! it was feedback from David that highlighted them! I am still learning the ropes and have no real history of poetry writing or education so even things like 'stanza' are new to me! As for your song lyrics - I'll give you a clue, it was the same band that were maki...
- Tue Nov 18, 2008 10:56 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Something that has destroyed my life
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1648
Re: Something that has destroyed my life
Writedis,
A very long read! but obviously in comparision to the subject matter which has been a hell of a battle!
Some really strong lines in here and the closing line is excellent.
Micl
A very long read! but obviously in comparision to the subject matter which has been a hell of a battle!
Some really strong lines in here and the closing line is excellent.
Micl
- Tue Nov 18, 2008 10:34 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Clerihew
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1930
Clerihew
Have you heard of Billy McGoo
head misshaped like a shoe.
Can you imagine the disgrace
of having laces on your face?
First attempt at one of these! thanks David I can have some fun with these![Smile :)](./images/smilies/icon_smile.gif)
Mick
head misshaped like a shoe.
Can you imagine the disgrace
of having laces on your face?
First attempt at one of these! thanks David I can have some fun with these
![Smile :)](./images/smilies/icon_smile.gif)
Mick
- Tue Nov 18, 2008 10:20 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Filled
- Replies: 11
- Views: 1913
Re: Filled
Dante,
Thanks for the great image!
Mick
Thanks for the great image!
Mick
- Tue Nov 18, 2008 10:19 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Tis me
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Tis me
Guys,
As per usual thanks for reading and feedback!
I have had a little tweak and feel it flows a little easier now?
Mick
As per usual thanks for reading and feedback!
I have had a little tweak and feel it flows a little easier now?
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 7:26 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Tis me
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Tis me
David,
Excellent site, not sure I could write fiction on a par with the stuff on that site!
Mick
Excellent site, not sure I could write fiction on a par with the stuff on that site!
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 7:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Tis me
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Tis me
David,
That looks like fun - I'll give that a go!
I'd like to try some nonsense poems, can you recommend any sites?
Many thanks
Mick
That looks like fun - I'll give that a go!
I'd like to try some nonsense poems, can you recommend any sites?
Many thanks
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 6:05 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Brighton
- Replies: 3
- Views: 791
Re: Brighton
Guys,
Not sure if this really works - I am obviously still a novice with structure etc!
All advice greatly received! - apart from give up!!!
Mick
Not sure if this really works - I am obviously still a novice with structure etc!
All advice greatly received! - apart from give up!!!
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 6:04 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Brighton
- Replies: 3
- Views: 791
Brighton
Brighton The shock, the pain, head to Brighton The journey there full of dread. The sea was angry with me that day, I think she knew my plan. Her energy was too extreme, I stopped and reflected. Took a room to look into my soul, Somehow I found hope in that 8 by 5 cell. Now I exorcise these demons, ...
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 5:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Tis me
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Tis me
Tis me (Revised) 2 eyes that are sparkling blue, 1 nose that’s badly askew, 2 ears that appear slightly chewed, 1 mouth that’s perpetually rude. 2 arms that are gangly like twine, 2 legs that can’t dance in time, 1 heart that pumps thanks to red wine, 1 bottom to dispose of the grime. Tis me 2 eyes ...
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 5:51 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: And so it goes on
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1125
Re: And so it goes on
Dante,
Another gem, the grim realities for some people!
The 'rich paper' is a great line also!
Mick
Another gem, the grim realities for some people!
The 'rich paper' is a great line also!
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 5:33 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
Enjoy the music,
as the flames lick the coffin,
now follow the light.
as the flames lick the coffin,
now follow the light.
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 3:25 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Twilight (Revised)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1732
Re: Twilight
Galaxy,
I have come back to this to see your revision, but it is no where to be seen! please keep the last line in when you do, I really like that ending!
Mick
I have come back to this to see your revision, but it is no where to be seen! please keep the last line in when you do, I really like that ending!
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 3:21 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: And that was that
- Replies: 5
- Views: 916
Re: And that was that
Great image and well written!
Mick
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 3:17 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Enter Drain
- Replies: 5
- Views: 858
Re: Enter Drain
Liked this, could almost be tweaked to read to my two boys.
Mick
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 3:15 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Saccharine
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1094
Re: Saccharine
Nice little poem!
I wonder if I could use this as a chat up line?
Mick
I wonder if I could use this as a chat up line?
Mick
- Mon Nov 17, 2008 3:08 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
Is all mental work,
surviving the daily toil,
all for some small change!
surviving the daily toil,
all for some small change!
- Sat Nov 15, 2008 12:44 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
To grasp the instant
For a moment of pleasure,
we hold and embrace.
For a moment of pleasure,
we hold and embrace.
- Fri Nov 14, 2008 11:34 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
“Bones to make my bread!”
Cry the voices in my head,
guilt, heavy like lead.
Cry the voices in my head,
guilt, heavy like lead.
- Fri Nov 14, 2008 10:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Sweet dreams
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1205
Re: Sweet dreams
Galaxy - chocolate! that reminds me of a certain river.....
JMS - pleased you enjoyed!
Mick
JMS - pleased you enjoyed!
Mick
- Thu Nov 13, 2008 9:35 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Meaning
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1175
Re: Meaning
Guys,
As always many thanks for the feedback - hopefully the revised version works a little bit better?
Mick
As always many thanks for the feedback - hopefully the revised version works a little bit better?
Mick
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
And walk down the lane,
did you think I did not see,
the bloodied shovel?
did you think I did not see,
the bloodied shovel?
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:20 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
Hither and thither
she makes me quiver all day.
Dump her tomorrow?
she makes me quiver all day.
Dump her tomorrow?
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:09 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570429
Re: Haiku Train
With a naughty grin
Uncle Tim leered at Betty,
Time to get my coat!
Uncle Tim leered at Betty,
Time to get my coat!