Poetry Forum

Suzanne,

Fishing is fun and I am sure that both tackle and bait can be adversly affected by the cold weather this time of year

Thanks for another enjoyable read.

Mick

Doctors shake their heads,
you have been taken from us.
Rest in peace Mother.

Strictly sad, but true,
I want to be Scooby Doo.
But hate Scraggy Doo!

My life is enough,
I ponder life’s misfortunes?
Got to earn my crust!

Suzanne,

Another great poem, I feel like I am that cake though

Mick

The switch is turned off,
obviously for a reason,
shall I turn it on?

They are all the same,
they are all so different.
They live in my head!

Is still not quite theirs,
but can you reason with bears?
They may tear my flares!

ItsSuperDan,

Welcome aboard and I really enjoyed your peom, some excellent lines but personally felt the last line did not give the poem the ending it deserves.

I am sure you will get really good advice on here!

And cool name also!

Mick

Galaxy,

Excellent re-write

Now keep them coming!

Mick

JMS,

You have drafted this well, I can really picture this!

Thank you!

Mick

Suzanne,

Ahh a nice reminder for me to not touch the sherry this Xmas!

I am repeating myself but another good one!

Mick

Suzanne,

I really like the way and style this has been written, another good one!


Maybe we should get a dance floor added on this site?

Mick

Thanks all - glad you enjoyed!

I am having fun with these!

Mick

Writedis,

Excellent, good revised version!

Mick

The story of Stanley Reginald Rotten,
Is a tale that should never be forgotten.
At the turn of the century he was an aristocrat,
No posh nosh for him as he feasted on cats!

Never to be seen,
like my fast eroding dreams,
please come back, one day?

Galaxy,

Really liked this one, ditto re the grammer, already looking forward to the re-write!

Mick

Galaxy,

Excellent re-write, drastic cuts indeed! also pleased the last line was not culled!

I still like the first verison also, very eerie!

Mick

Silly badger hound!
you're supposed to make no sound,
dinner underground!

David,

Thanks, I think that is the first time I have featured in any poem!

Not sure if I should be worried now!

Thanks for the feedback all!

Mick

Slices Jack's sausage,
He wakes to a bloody shock,
revenge for cheating!

Pray internally,
will your god really save you?
Tick tock, tick tock, gone!

Grass turns green again,
time has healed the deepest cuts,
love restored beauty.

Dante,

So few words but sooooo many images!

Nice one.

Mick

And ditto with being productive of late!