Raisin,
Yeah- I guess we have all experienced the 'fake' variety of smiles!
I absolutely loved the last bit..'bitch'!!
Great read, thanks,
Galaxy
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- Tue Nov 25, 2008 9:02 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Smile
- Replies: 21
- Views: 3717
- Tue Nov 25, 2008 8:59 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Within me (revised)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 2426
Re: Within me
Suzanne,
I love this poem!
Something I guess I can identify with too..
Thanks,
Galaxy
I love this poem!
Something I guess I can identify with too..
Thanks,
Galaxy
- Tue Nov 25, 2008 8:57 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: All happened in November
- Replies: 14
- Views: 2231
Re: All happened in November
Lake,
That was a great read, liked the structure of it too especially the use of numbers!
I could also feel the loss..
Galaxy
That was a great read, liked the structure of it too especially the use of numbers!
I could also feel the loss..
Galaxy
- Tue Nov 25, 2008 8:52 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Prima Donna (Revised)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Prima Donna (Revised)
Thank you Suzanne and Mick!!
Thanks also to all -for taking time to give me some very valuable and useful feedback!
Galaxy
Thanks also to all -for taking time to give me some very valuable and useful feedback!
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 2:59 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: thoughts on my faults
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1535
Re: thoughts on my faults
I liked that 'deniable incompetence!'
Clever bit of writing, enjoyed the read
Thanks,
Galaxy
Clever bit of writing, enjoyed the read
Thanks,
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 2:56 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Prima Donna (Revised)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Prima Donna (Revised)
Thank you El!!
Glad you liked it!
Galaxy
Glad you liked it!
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:53 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570107
Re: Haiku Train
Please come back, one day
Because you stole my best suit
There'll be hell to pay!
Because you stole my best suit
There'll be hell to pay!
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:49 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Clerihew part II
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1714
Re: Clerihew part II
Mick,
Yuk!!! Very funny, enjoyed it
Galaxy
Yuk!!! Very funny, enjoyed it
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Russian Salad
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1126
Re: Russian Salad
Arunansu,
Interesting! I have got some strange images running round in my mind at the moment about this one!! I enjoyed it!
Thanks,
Galaxy
Interesting! I have got some strange images running round in my mind at the moment about this one!! I enjoyed it!
Thanks,
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:42 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: In the event of a global crisis... (a pantoum)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1986
Re: In the event of a global crisis...
Raisin,
I enjoyed the read, also the form of the poem itself!
I'm interested in learning about all the different forms of poems, I never realised there were so many different ways to write poetry, it's giving me some ideas and food for thought with future offerings....!!
Galaxy
I enjoyed the read, also the form of the poem itself!
I'm interested in learning about all the different forms of poems, I never realised there were so many different ways to write poetry, it's giving me some ideas and food for thought with future offerings....!!
Galaxy
- Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:35 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Prima Donna (Revised)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Re: Prima Donna (Revised)
Thanks all for reading the poem and your words of advice and encouragement! Mike, well spotted! I like how that reads.. Raisin, thanks for your help and advice on this, it reads much better with punctuation! I'm learning as I go along and I really appreciate any help or suggestions anyone can offer!...
- Sat Nov 22, 2008 8:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Twilight (Revised)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1731
Re: Twilight (Revised)
Took the advice...did some major tweaking!!
Galaxy
Galaxy
- Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:47 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Prima Donna (Revised)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2266
Prima Donna (Revised)
Revision: The ever vengeful comeback queen, jealous, spiteful, maybe mean. She tossed her tainted, poisoned heart in to a bed of trampled red roses leaving the earth soiled and unclean. The always present wrath she showed, sadness and pain on all bestowed had grown, from a stormy sea of pain, that b...
- Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:19 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Tis me
- Replies: 11
- Views: 2265
Re: Tis me
Mick,
I enjoyed the imaginative description!!
Well done!
Galaxy
I enjoyed the imaginative description!!
Well done!
Galaxy
- Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:17 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Stop Letting Me Think Of You
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1546
Re: Stop Letting Me Think Of You
Hiya El,
Liked the title...I can see where you're coming from, I liked the randomness of the 7.37 bit!
It made me smile actually
Thanks
Galaxy
Liked the title...I can see where you're coming from, I liked the randomness of the 7.37 bit!
It made me smile actually
Thanks
Galaxy
- Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:13 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Clerihew
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1930
Re: Clerihew
That was good fun Mick!
Put a smile on my face....thanks
Galaxy
Put a smile on my face....thanks
Galaxy
- Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:12 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: She was asking for it!
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1807
Re: She was asking for it!
Something to think about......
Difficult subject, however it does make you think..?
Galaxy
Difficult subject, however it does make you think..?
Galaxy
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:51 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570107
Re: Haiku Train
The bloodied shovel
Propped outside an old hovel
Who dares enter in?
Propped outside an old hovel
Who dares enter in?
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:45 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Sweet dreams
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1204
Re: Sweet dreams
Mick,
Mmmmmmmmm, chocolate!!
Brings back some memories!!
Galaxy
Mmmmmmmmm, chocolate!!
Brings back some memories!!
Galaxy
- Tue Nov 11, 2008 10:43 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Haiku Train
- Replies: 7783
- Views: 1570107
Re: Haiku Train
Dump her tomorrow
At the edge of the meadow
And walk down the lane
At the edge of the meadow
And walk down the lane
- Thu Nov 06, 2008 10:45 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Twilight (Revised)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1731
Re: Twilight
Elphin,
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
As a very new poet I have taken your comments on board and will work at my writing style and will hopefully develop ideas as I grow in experience.
Thanks,
Galaxy
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
As a very new poet I have taken your comments on board and will work at my writing style and will hopefully develop ideas as I grow in experience.
Thanks,
Galaxy
- Thu Nov 06, 2008 10:41 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Twilight (Revised)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1731
Re: Twilight
I'm glad you enjoyed it Mick!
Thanks
Galaxy
Thanks
Galaxy
- Thu Nov 06, 2008 6:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Embers
- Replies: 13
- Views: 2600
Re: Embers
Mick,
The last line makes a strong statement...
Another good one!!
Well done
Galaxy
The last line makes a strong statement...
Another good one!!
Well done
Galaxy
- Thu Nov 06, 2008 6:29 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Twilight (Revised)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1731
Twilight (Revised)
Twilight (Revised) As the day merged with the night Blending with the white moonlight A solitary candle’s amber glow Memories of long ago Sitting on the threadbare chair Empty words no feelings there Your voice, devoid of tender tone The light switched on and I went home The rays of rainbow coloured...
- Wed Nov 05, 2008 6:41 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Firework Bucket
- Replies: 13
- Views: 2376
Re: Firework Bucket
I'm sitting listening to fireworks as I read this..
'Candle-lit wall of yesterday's mind' love that line!
Well done El,
Thanks,
Galaxy
'Candle-lit wall of yesterday's mind' love that line!
Well done El,
Thanks,
Galaxy