Poetry Forum

Thanks Dedalus. I'm going to be pondering the fixed lovingly suggestions some more. I'm pretty much ignorant of grammar rules and am mainly led by instinct; what looks, sounds right etc. so thanks for that. What if it were written fixed, lovingly, eyes ? Or is even that to boldly go where no man has...

Well... it's been nagging me ever since and in the end I chose to omit the 'poet' at the end. So thanks for all the feedback. Everytime I read it after posting on here, when I got to the end it just poked my brain... had to get rid of it.

Thanks all for the welcoming.

Thanks Stuart.

Why spoil a nice image by dumping it into the realms of a clumsy wordsmith?!

Ha ha... because other than clumsy they're stubborn fellows.

I wanted to express how I feel about poetry. Like Ben I have niggles and my niggle is the potter... as opposed to the Potter.

Thanks Ben. I've gone over your suggestion a few times, but it seems to lose something. I think it emphasises her fixation more when putting fixed before lovingly . I'd put comma's there if it would read better, but I'm not sure I should. As for 'poet' at the end, it's the end of a hidden stanza... ...

I have to admit that I couldn't put head to tail without reading through the comments (I was reading quite late at night... well, that's my excuse).

An accomplished write, and very sad. The last stanza is extremely haunting and beautifully written. Thanks.

Ha ha... nothing to do with Harry and no rabbits. Thanks for your comments. The capitalisation of Potter is merely to distinguish it from the meaning of the other potter in the title meaning to 'dabble'. The Potter, being an artist, is taking her work seriously and attentively, and the gist of the p...

Should I find this humorous? A tatooist vexed with a customer? Someone with a tatoo beneath a tree is about to get popped by a tatooist? Or is the tatooist about to get popped by the very object of his desire? A very interesting write... and I enjoyed reading, and re-reading... Thanks for sharing.

Potter no potter Observe the Potter at her wheel A delicate craft is this The clay moulded precise Exquisitely tender Observe the potter at her wheel Exquisitely tender Observe Watch how she glides her hand In slight magical moves Reshaping the clay to life With graceful ease Watch how she glides h...

Since November I started reaching out with my poetry. I put up a website in June or July last year to show off the little work I'd done for a few years. There's more about who I am on there (if it's of any interest). I've only just started reading poetry as well, and since joining forums and such a ...