Poetry Forum

I enjoyed the last two lines best. It's an imaginative piece but difficult to make the cutting of toenails resonate of poetry. 'And would that strand,/if reassembled, have a gait' - I don't understand this and the introduction of gate at the end only serves to complicate it further. 'summer's sweete...

I'm somewhat confused by the poem's argument but that apart there is some loose use of language which can readily be rectified. For instance, is it generally apparent that a blueprint has weave ? I feel you're trying a bit too hard here to get the idea of the roughness in. Perhaps it would be better...

I enjoyed that because I empathise with the poem's point of view. Not much else to add really. It's not very brave , is it ? but its transparency works in its favour I suppose.

Too loose and uncontrolled for me. For instance you can't 'unearth' something from water. Unearth is quite the wrong word here. The poem needs far more imaginative use for language and hugely tightening. It's very difficult to find any poetry in it. Furthermore, I've watched Big Cat Diary and heard ...

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a happy little poem but I found it somewhat over-indulgent, twee even, dare I say it. Where's the reader in all this ? You don't let him/her in. It's what I call a 'so what' poem. I suppose it will do to remind you of a day you really enjoyed and I'm happy for you for that.

hmm . . . I can't help feeling that the metaphysics behind this poem couldn't have been handled more imaginatively. I found the dialogue rather lack lustre and the reasoning somewhat dubious. Sorry but this poem simply doesn't have enough about it to make me want to look into its mechanics further.

For me this is a poem to be experienced rather than analysed. The language clearly comes from a wordsmith and perhaps becomes the raison d'etre of the poem in places which is no bad thing. I thought it was a fine piece of writing, economic of expression and each word successfully fights of all alter...