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the productivity culture rolls her eggs over blotting paper minds within the school gates. For some work is an invisible great cuckoo that whipsers stalgtite lies; "Feed me! wriggling gobs of overtime" The many dumb eyeless fingers gladly unwind onion tasks thinking there Friday night knic...

hi, this has very subtle but strong imagery which was not easily understood by myself in its first reading ( abit like a good quality dark chocolate the sublime after taste only comes and on kitten feet if you slow down and wait) so I ate some more , sorry read more! and got more flavours i like the...

there is an innocent simplicity to this both in the use of one liners which compact a lot of meaning into so few words. and secondly a natural flow which mimics the beautiful relationships we see in nature,moon,wind,waves,sand linking these strong images to massive emotions and concepts such as love...

Cleansings The warning Gulls, screeched like forks emptying plates whilst LCD's monitors sweat Leeming's last breath. The data reads like dying kelp,mobiles pour seashell voices into toddlers disbeleiving heads. and the Dollars as lost as green glass on a pebble beech bonuses weep for Gannets who vo...

the meaning of this seems instructive and anarchistic (can't find sp check on here!) and although it seems to shock the parrallel it presents in the following line make you stop and think. hey its ok to do these things because they are morally legitamised by commercial,religous and war practice. the...

I felt the following when i read this; wandering as in concentration Diplomatic gestures dramatize my incompetent tongue. I hunger in this illogical place, idle thoughts flit into detachment. maybe the thoughts of someone working in DFS on a sunday afternoon as some one complains to them. I like the...

cheers all. My point of correlation was I hoped to be a walrus colony and the trolll an eskimo(sorry inuit) hunter but it weakened and I like the idea of survival and normality as bedfellows and the modern world is not far removed. I need to tighten up the metaphor "simple" and the repetit...

Forums Red Mad Walruses stab return and ICBM insults drop New arrivals sit on rock and scrape lichen platitudes. The colony forms reason like drunk saturday night whites then absorbs with amoebic simplicity. A hdyra headed troll hunts with enticing inflamatory morsels then goes clubbing,beating,gorg...

Hi Danté, thanks for your welcome and also your comments.I agree with your comments re the layout and spacing.luckily it came out as I wrote it then my wife typed it up as i'm one fingered -not literally.I should pay more attention to the delivery and presentation,(my grammar is awful) the piece is ...

Hi my real name is John Madden , thanks for letting me join your community theres loads of interesting stuff on here and its great to be able to give and receive feedback. I've written on and mainly off for 25 years.I have found that like most of us I suspect that we are compelled to write when emot...

t's about my dear old going to work bike (twab To Work And Back) Twab's Day The patchy chippings please my heavy humming tyres Nightly for many years we have rode 'our' road His legs pulse my tubular steel frame and I compliantly spring Going home is what matters most to me, a sudden hesitancy. Then...

it does sound to me like something you might read in a very expensive christmas cracker , which is a good thing as we only have what was woolworth crackers here. i think writing about large concepts such as time and satisfaction very demanding and difficult but you have fermented it down in to a ver...

the wonderful flight to the mushroom planet the black sheep vanity fair crime and punishment a dummies guide to living guide to living on a desert island albums johnny cash anthology the sound of a crowd at a football match thats what call music 1(so I can own it) luxury item - a parrot,african grey...

you have encapsulated a powerfully emotive part of most peoples past.i liked the short choppy style it makes it very visual especially the shed description,as a young boy my shed was a "stable where independence lived". Dry creosote, sunny-aspect shed splinters rasp, warped timber hinges c...