Poetry Forum

oh dear if you think this is shady then I should probably stop now. I find i'm best able to write about the subjects most people avoid!!

Thank you for your crits - I will work them into the poem and see what I come up with

It's not personal - as in nothing to do with me rather a emalgimation of other people's experiences. So crit away

The Dead Baby We lied to you Alexandra Well I did - your fathers footsteps out the door committed a similar crime ‘well, is he sleeping, or not’ you ask – all hush and wonder cutting up the contradictions fed to you by endless nurses and doctors crafting a paper divide of fucked up good guys and ba...

okay I hate to disagree with everyone, mainly because it seems I will miss out on tea, but I felt this was the start of a bigger poem.

I'm a little confused I thought the whole point of the poem being short was to tie in with the theme?

thoke wrote:

snowphi wrote:I've decided I must like crap poetry

Why? Because this is crap and you like it?

Ben

Well you decided it was crap and I'm not an experienced critic.

I like it. I like the dichotomy of emotions it ellicits

I think if Victor Mancini wrote a poem - it would go a little something like this .. . .

what an awesome poem - I think i'm going to have to read your other poem again I'd hate to of missed something

I've decided I must like crap poetry

Well 'I can't cope with christmas' either so what can one expect.

When I first came on this site it was to help me deal with criticism - it's really working I'm loving the criticism for Thoke - I only hope my work elicits such ardent discussion.

hello , This is my first crit on this site. I think the lines are too awkward (although I apreciate that a certain amount of awkwardness gives merit to the theme) and the previous comment is, in my opinion, correct regarding the change in lines. I'm not going to go into which lines are stella and wh...