Poetry Forum

Hey There, I will have to agree with the lad just before me, I think it was a little long. Having said that I think it was brilliantly written with the question/statement thingy you had going on there. I liked it and thought it was a good read as I said the only thing I could fault was the length. W...

Hello all and thanks very much for replying! I have been flat out working and have not had time or the mind space to sit down and write a worthy reply to your posts. My punctuation and things relating to structure ie: when to start a new line, should I use capitals and all that jazz is what I am fin...

Swirling roung the iris balons of salty water burst so filthy, never clean I am marred a sinner Encapsulated by the amniotic sac my heart can't feel the ripples of your disgust dreched in wickedness so you stay dry you are my creation two children ingress upon the slaughterhouse are we sure With nee...

I like some of the images this poem conjures up in my mind. Some I thought were a little cheesy and possibly too descriptive. What I mean by this is when I had read the poem I was told what to see rather than allow my own imagination to build her own images. I am very new to poetry so I can only off...

hey there, I liked this read muchly! I think it has potential, if you want to develop it more. I read it a couple of times and came to the conclusion that the " I " in the poem could be developed, why was he/she dirty and who can't see that he/she is clean. The title seems a little bland I...