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very clever use of language to offer a visual, audio image good use of line lengths and breaks to suggest a 'blues' feel. Read with passion.

This totally confused me - was Artemis a musketeer? Thought the words were nice but did not see the relevance to Artemis, sorry.

I understood it to be innermost thoughts - where I am and how I feel suggest its the ramblings of turmoil and confusion and so therefore does not need contextualising.

The Path of Life is never straight Its full of twists and bends It stretches out ahead of us We don’t know where it ends The path is not always smooth and flat It may be an uneven track - you slip, you stumble Sometimes you fall - things may Look better looking back Sometimes there is a mapped out r...

and the johnson boys
in top hats and tails - parading
for the wedding march

solo double act.
the singer and dancer
hard to follow that

Lovely piece well presented - lots of imagination mixed with reality well done!

theres a lot to take in from this poem and a lot of information to sift through, especially with the length of some of the stanzas. Having said that the subjects that arise are worthy of recognition

Overgrown,
A torrid tangle
Of weeds…..
And green glutinous algae provide shelter
For mosquito larvae, pond skaters and water boatmen
Ripples distort reflection like smears of grease on glass
Calm and serene the water stagnates through life.

Why does it go from "we" to "her" - loses the intimacy - shouldn't it be "you"!

I thought the imagery was very suiting to a saxaphone especially the bit about the waves - felt there was a lot more that could have been said - good start!

A beautiful piece about age and how it is defined by the wrinkly frail characteristics - enjoyed the age bit being seen as not important anymore 'I pick a number' - made me smile!

Vivid imagery like the un-manicured lawns, always previously thought of casles as masculine - strong unyielding. Good to get a different viewpoint

Through the tangle twist of trees
Sunlight peeks
Casting its light on bedazzled leaves -
Welcoming the warmth.
Moss and lichen spread along
Outstretched branches
Like a gate that bends and weaves
Forebidding entrance
To that somewhere hidden…..

Wonderful read very clever use of words almost double entendre in meaning I thought. I got the impression this was a very well thought out insight both to physical attributes and mechanics of radio plus the mood they can radiate.

Scraggy tree Old man of the earth Long forgotten, times of blossom Brittle boned Creaking with the aches and pains Of arthritic joints Spindly branches that reach like walking sticks Seeking a path To amble slowly Through another spring Basking in the warmth of the summer Dreading the winds the autu...

I thought this started off very well a strong sense of being there soaking up the sights then with the xx i sort of lost the way a bit but thought the ending was strong again well done - nice idea

Love this, though wasnt sure if it was a modern or old time setting - timeless visual attributes though

Hi to you all and thanks for the comments Punctuations not my strong point but will try to listen and adapt in further posts Thanks!

I am putting on weight At least that's what the scales say They lie - I hasten to add Under the bathroom sink They should hold a sticker - "Use rarely!" Or rarely used! I am putting on weight At least thats what this skirt tells me As I struggle with the button It fabricates the truth abou...

liked the visual impact of this - great

I enjoyed the imagery of this