Poetry Forum

Much improved MP3 - recorded by someone who had a clue.

Also I've left out the machine gun. Too naff.

Marten, Many thanks. I've been so uncertain about my first attempt at a song. Friends are just too nice to tell me that it's a total disaster so I remained insecure! I've put the original back on the first post so it can be compared with the latest version. At goggt.blogspot.com there is a video ver...

Thank you so much for the comments. I wrote the song and play the guitar on the recording but have a tame, competent singer to make a song out of it. I've re-written and re-recorded following the comments. I've replaced the original and also attached it to this reply. I would be grateful for an opin...

Thank you for the comments, they are much appreciated. It was almost as difficult to find the courage to post this as it was to write it. The poem was written because I had to do something about the emotional pain. I'm not a poet, not even that keen on poetry - this just wrote itself. I don't know i...

My first poem since school. (written of necessity) Learning to Love. I didn’t know that I could fall in love when I started out with you. My fortress heart was all secure, the barriers were true. Another girl, another bed, my mind was there, but free. I was safe within my world, no one could capture...

Song written to go with a book of a World War 1 Soldiers letters from the trenches. My first (probably last) song. Original version attached W I P Harry’s Song Chorus What you doing Harry? When you coming Home? What you doing, Harry? Feeling all alone No one told you how the trenches would be No one...

The title sets up the poem and creates a warm, secure feeling before starting to read. Lovely. Then,the words successfully captures the jumbled thoughts that we have when falling asleep, dozing, dreaming or, perhaps,lost somewhere in them all, unable to distinguish just what's happening. You choose ...

Builds tension nicely in the first section, but somehow seems to lose momentum and just work its way to the end.

The second section doesn't seem as "clean" as the first.