Poetry Forum

Yes i like the edited version much better. Still just as macabre if not more so than before, but there is something I cant put my finger on that makes me like it, the X Factor maybe? And I agree with you sharra, a very sad feeling came over me when I read this poem, felt very sorry for her attempts ...

Really liked your poem,"A shard of shattered mountain." what a lovely way to describe a skimmer, also loved "a life-affirming touch stone a piece of aggregate. " a wonderful poem full of flavour excellent read x

Yes loved your poem, until the inhabited fence threw my thoughts away. don't understand that bit. used too lean, on sit by , walk past, but surely not inhabit? and again skywhite, not really! Sounds odd the rest got me buzzing liked it a lot.x

The British Empire......Been along time since I herd that , I will be up on my soap box in a minute and go reeling of in a rant, so will just say we used to have such a proud country. And a day of for Empire day, I believe. Even up to the early 70s things where o.k. its been down hill since then.......

No wilder winds could ever blow, as bitter icy wind sheets glow, against pale moons soft white light, what ghastly deed was done tonight. Strike of crimson on the boots, that scuttle over craggy rock, caught in tangling clumpy shoots, snared in heathers wiry roots, Did old Demdike leave the forest, ...

Like this one lovely, especially like the line. " More gold than all the buttercups. " Ahhhhh x

Very funny poem like it a lot, you got that Dublin way down to a tee .x

Lowry with words, well I will take that as a compliment thank you very much David. Painters and poets go together perfectly. x

Liked your poem Brian, a very nice piece to read and some lovely words, liked the first two lines, and the last three, not sure if i liked the word "begets." Seemed dated and old fashioned, and didn't fit in with your modern poem, but enjoyed reading it very nice. x

I must admit although I like Woody Allen, I haven't yet seen the sleeper but it is on my list, its just I keep forgetting about it, This short piece was written for a Daily Mail competition, you had to write the opening lines of a novel containing 150 words or less. Didn't win of course, but it was ...

Stuart, thank you very much for your help I do indeed see what you mean, much much better. But poor Humphrey Bogart, tromping though the fog had me in stitches that, couldn't stop thinking about him, Hahahaha still laughing now, can just picture stumbling across him, with his cockeyed trilby and his...

What a lovely feel good poem really like it, smooth sounding easy on the eye and very vivid words, love all of it, " What if sandalwood looses its scent. " and the final line, "Embraced by fog and cotton wood seeds." absolutely wonderful.Think the title is perfect and drew me to ...

a Poem.
A collection of words set out in a poetic way, not necessarily but mostly, words not normally used in everyday talk.
in my opinion. x

Ice rains, down these valleys shadows crawl across the peaks, Jurassic birds in clumsy flight, ghostly panthers creep. Mist descends eerie hills, above were dragons sleep. Bogart stalks fairy dells, stealing dreams from wishing wells In limestone, quarries its been known, to see a strange and evil g...

AHHHHH. Thank you for your explanation, a bit Simon garfunkel then, Homeward bound. although that song had clear meaning, I always think if it has to be explained then there's a problem... Or your writing for a closed group of academics to the exclusion of the masses maybe. Nothing wrong with that e...

ARRRRRR... Lovely you did it again I really hate that word so, it put me of your poem completely. Its such a harsh harsh word and always annoys me used so freely these days, I can tolerate it if it makes a very clear bold statement but mostly it is used to shock and say. I am a young person this is ...

A story of boringly repetitive office work, when you should have been working, or indeed was working but so repetitive and dire, your mind begins to wander,till you could scream, LET ME OUT .... That's the message I get from this. Made me smile as I was once in such a job I thought I might go comple...

Was going to pass on by as if id never took a peep at your poem, as I did not want to appear less intelligent than those who have left a comment and seem to understand your poem, But then thought, what the eck. I have read it, so you deserve to have my opinion. Is it about the love for the river in ...

I got the feeling this was a love poem to a girl who rejected you.A strange way to express your feelings, got the point she broke your heart? if it was supposed to represent the way you felt, Powerful. but if you actually sent it to her, errrrr not a good move. Maybe I got it all wrong, and my story...

Sort of liked yet didn't like your poem. seemed to lack tenderness for me and felt more lustful, just on the edge of becoming a bit smutty. found the " I lean over to watch her." Bit peeping tom entered my mind. but you didn't go in that direction, just turned at the last minute, to make i...

Ahhh I see, well in that case, yes I think it would be much easier to read, and I found it scary, probably because I had that voice from the back of my head whilst reading. Deep and slow sort of mythical, I am the darkness in your soul, that haunts your deepest thoughts and spoils your dreams, sort ...

A lovely poem very much enjoyed reading it, gave a feeling of happiness until....," Where dad chained me to a tree and said fish so I did. " At that moment i had to stop and read again from the top, the mood changed and the poem became sad, with a hint of wonder why ? Because I have such a...

A first class poem Dante, your words flowed like a warm summer stream, infused with subtle scents of midsummer evening, is all I can say to describe.
A wonderful poem made my heart sing. x

Thank you for your advice vintij and as always love you to lovely x

Enjoyed this poem very clever, I think you could add a lot more with just a bit more thought, unique idea and made me smile, liked it very much.x