Poetry Forum

I didn't quite see the pregnant woman in your poem, but the sea turtle , thought it was just about that,so as i read it, I was thinking, turtles leave there eggs and the babies fend for themselves, was a bit confused. Also. " curl your toes." Do turtles have toes? I thought, and fastens he...

Well what a strange train of thinking you have John G ! Although I can say it did make me smile. "tuck them in like human sausage rolls." umm don't know if I would use that particular line yet in a strange way I liked it brought the image to life, will say for a while at least when I tuck ...

I was awake. Yet awake from what? I knew it wasn't sleep, suddenly becoming aware of running water, rushing down my neck and cascading of my toes. "Whats going on I croaked Where am I ?" The shadowy one didn't answer kept annoyingly repeating. " Edith you are awake the year is 3973,&q...

Very weird piece of writing you have created. Not my sort of thing I'm afraid, got a bit boring and immature for my liking.Not very funny.
Had you been smoking something ?

Eeeek! better not bother doing that exercise then . Enjoyable story and twenty minutes, clever. Sometimes an idea just flows and works, other times it doesn't. enjoyed the read.

Just stopped by to have a quick gander. Your poem intrigues me. Haven't the time just at the minute to re read and absorb, so will call back later to give it more time. But thought I would let you know, I do like it.

Awwwwww What a wonderful poem, really enjoyed it. Didn't make my brain ache in the same way as some of the work on here! Very sad and did like the fact that you mention Iraq mothers, sort of made it more personal as only another mother would know. You have a great style of writing, like the way you ...

I am baffled by your poem but that means nothing ? I sort of like it though, in a strange don't understand sort of way, is it about the homeless , who would sell there soul, yet not sell a coat? Probably totally wrong, I seem to need a poem to have clear meaning , yes its good to write things that m...

awwww soul mate eh! liked the feel good factor of your poem, the only thing i would say is you have eyes in two lines didn't really like that maybe if you could find a different word for one of them would be better ? x

Will try and have a go with both suggestions Dante, yes I can see that maybe if I wasn't confined to the rhyme I would have a better choice of words, it would be very interesting to let my mind run free but were that will take me I haven't a clue and I will never know if I don't give it a go, thanks...

No wilder winds could ever blow as bitter icy wind sheets glow. Against pale moons soft white light what ghastly deed was done tonight. Who scuttles over craggy rocks snorting, breathless, stumbles, shocked, in foot tangling tussock clumpy shoots, snared in heathers wiry roots. Did old Demdike leave...

Loved reading your poem, cant comment on the technicalities of stuff i don't know about. All I can comment on are the words, and I loved them. x

Your poem made me smile, loved the thought of the stirs talking. How many times Ive herd my mum and my gran before her say eeeeeeeey if only theses walls could talk what a laugh we would have. Only last week I was in a grand building that had seen better days it had been turned into a sort of indoor...

Again I'm not to sure if you want the opinion of a novice, but as I have said before, if I take the time to read your poem, I think it is only polite for me to leave a comment. Is this poem about reaching rock bottom? That's my impression. As if you thought you had been there before, but fell even f...

Really liked your poem, flowed beautifully easy on the eye, not to complicated for me. Just hope, there wasn't a hidden meaning in it that Ive missed ?

Thank you lovely for your lovely comments x

Thanks for taking the time to read and leave a comment, much appreciated x

What a lovely soothing poem made me relax just reading it wonderful x

Monochrome years of yesterday I see you vivid beast, burn your fire belt it out, flay your cinders red, roar your mighty engine bark exhaust and hiss your steam, split my ears, scream your whistle, pick up speed slam right passed, haul your clanking waggons thunder through the years, just a dream aw...

A great poem, I loved it was there beside you waching your son in the pool very vivid x

What an enjoyable read, and how true if your occupied doing something enjoyable you can get through most illnesses with ease. A interesting fact. People who smoke get up and about and so get well much quicker than non smokers, they need to get up and get walking so they can go and have a fag. I know...

I have been to have a look at this poem before and had to re read it quite a few times although I have mixed emotions about it. Very macabre poem, yet i do not find it distasteful, in fact i like it. I like the way you write very much. Reminds me of a film I saw, cant remember the name of it, where ...

My little comment only small but means a thousand words ....I Liked it just the way it was. ummmm except the title. x

Loved your poem made me laugh out loud, very easy on the eye and although long, wasn't a bit boring to read.
Errrrr there seems to be a few, including yourself, mixing dream and fantasy into your waking hours hahaha ...Kate Moss ? is she really stalking a few of the blokes on here !

Well thank you arrunansu, ross and ray, very very helpful comments and will edit, you have all been so kind in the help that you offer very much appreciate you taking time out to comment ta very much xx