Poetry Forum

Thanks for all your help everyone i have been busy reading and studying poetry, to try and find my way, without losing what I want to say. Words flow quickly for me, yet I seem to keep getting things ....just wrong ??? Will keep trying as I love words and what they can evoke x

wawww.... never mind" Ross" i wana know now ! What wont we believe lovely ? x

Very nice lovely, sort of like a hymn, could imagine singing to that enjoyable read." Better to believe in something than blind as a bat." Very nice indeed x

Very pleasing images in your lovely poem, enjoyed reading it nicely done my friend x

Loved this made me laugh, could be any father mother and child. everyone who has a small child can relate to your words. that's what happy memories are made of don't you think the very best of what happiness a child can bring. Captured a million thoughts and a thousand smiles in just a few words. x ...

Loved the feel of your poem wonderful words nicely said, loved "vague sun mirrors on waist high waters." What a lovely image x

thanks everyone x

Thank you to lovely for once again for taking a moment to leave a comment. arunasu, yes thanks for your advice on my poem I really appreciate your comments, and will be editing as soon as I get a moment. Springwood is a place in whalley Lancashire, and was called Oxeywoode before the name change. Th...

I caught the last of wafflelite,
then sang my song of sprey
my foam is full of efferfess,
reminds me of the sea.

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Drenched in rhododendrons fire red blaze, hidden beneath Salk's of bluebell haze, seeped in ransom's heady scent tiny footprints made in silk, this enchanted spot that elves frequent. From under crimson hoods pixies peep, and winsome squirrels lightly leap. I see the place where fairies sleep. Gentl...

Lovely , this poem is really good I do like it very much, it has a deep sorrowful tone that makes me feel a little sad. very well written x

Very sad read, but I didn't find much poetry in there. you have a lot to say in a strong way, I found it a painful story, not a poem. But I will say keep writing down the words rearranging, in some other order. Writing is a powerful tool of expressing emotion, I am no expert by a long way. My heart ...

Than you for your honest opinions, And yes did post in the experienced forum to get a better run down of the mistakes I am making, so will take up your offer of asking the experts there views on my poetry from time to time, I want to write good if possible great poetry and although I am far from tha...

Thank you very much for your time in reading and replying, I am not at all offended by what you have to say, the reason I joined this group was to get genuine feedback to my attempt at poetry, I need and crave to improve, my ambition is to write with confidence. I appreciate your comments.x

Wouldn't say the best song ever written,but agree a great song, alot of great songs came out of the 60s best era for true talent in my opinion.Bob Dylan wrote great songs, The Kinks, Simon and garfunkel, john Lennon, Paul McCartney,Roy Orbison,could go on for ever. love Beautiful south they have som...

We went on a mission, my brothers and me,a great adventure just us three, we loaded jars that once held jam, crammed to burst in our Alan's pram. Coal it seemed Dad confessed, would turn to diamonds if compressed. we made our way through cotton mills, till we arrived at coal pit hills, I remember we...

Whaw scary place this experienced poets place!!! I loved this poem very much on reading it I found it a very sad poem,.Then I read the comments and the things others picked up on, eeek. On re reading found them to make sense. And Simon yes the only Simon I ever knew was the Simon who met a pie-man. ...

really enjoyed this, very nicely said, enjoyable to read loved the butterfly theme, very gentle subtle writing, x

Extract from a short story. We arrived in Fleetwood at 11 30 with half an hour to spare. It was a dismal day, a misty white frost covered the pebble beach, the clouds were low and heavy with late autumn drabness, Winter was well on it's way. The little row of gift shops was closed, metal shutters ad...

Love the twist of this poem, made me laugh very good. not sure about "She morning woke." That line didn't seem to flow so smooth my opinion only. loved the rest.x

Liked this poem, thoughts many of us have i think.x

Cant believe only I have commented on your poem, maybe its the title putting people of reading it? personally I loved the title.X

Yes hands say lots of things that words alone cannot. liked your poem the first part up to, " squeeze my fingertips." Felt personal and romantic liked it up to there. The second half seemed to go into a list of what hands can do wasn't so keen."Cold hands warm heart!" As if you'd...

Thanks Arian for taking the time to read my poem, i will edit my poem taking into consideration comments made, I'm not very good at punctuation that's a fact, and i know it can make a great deal of difference to how a poem comes across, so will have a go at making it sound better with a bit more wor...

Well enjoyed your snap-it of a tale, and very vividly I could see what the girl in the story could see,(I presume it is a girl walking in the garden) a bit of a bored tom boy, young teen maybe ? I was captured by your writing, and left wondering what would happen next. The beginnings of a interestin...