Poetry Forum

The second original worked best for me. I'm with Marc on 'aimless walkers' and I'd be tempted to end at 'fall' . I'd also edit 'and I wonder' to 'and wonder'. I enjoyed reading it!

Thank you to everyone that has taken the time to read and comment on 'Cat' Ray - glad you liked it and you're spot on with your suggestions. I was at that tricky stage where I knew the scan wasn't quite right, but couldn't get there myself. So, thanks again. Peter - Hello! Thanks for telling me abou...

A sweet moment . I can relate to the lying awake next to he that sleeps theme!

What a lovely poem.It made me pause, think and re-read. I got the sense of a son away on his travels, but the theme of absence keenly felt could apply equally well to any lost love.

Thanks for a great read. I'm truly impressed by the quality of writing on this site.

Thanks for the link to Keats. Really enjoyed both his and yours.

Cat Her sleek black pelt is smooth in the moonlight her eyes are slips of green. She marks her patch on the low red wall, sits within the yellow arc of the street lamp. He pulls around the corner, crawls to a halt. She flicks her tail high and drizzle slick. as he beckons her over. She follows the d...

I love the image of the calender pages unsettled by the breeze and the hint of disquiet within the room. One sparrow escapes through the window, eh? Lucky her/him. Lost me on Endymion. Any clues?

I got the drum beat in this one, too. I think the idea of the questionning dead is very thought provoking.

Can someone please explain anaphoric poetry to this first-timer? Plenty of imagery here and I liked 'the scent of impulse slithering through my mind' cos we've all been there!