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by Minstrel
Fri May 04, 2007 10:42 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: A nice poem by Wallace Stevens
Replies: 6
Views: 2263

' It is not to be seen beneath the appearances that tell of it '

What a great line.
by Minstrel
Fri May 04, 2007 7:51 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: An apostrophe question
Replies: 13
Views: 4521

Cheers guys (or should that be Cheers' guys')

Most helpful. Probably should have re-read our absent friend's advice more closely.

Thoke, buy your own Minstrels!
by Minstrel
Thu May 03, 2007 9:50 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: An apostrophe question
Replies: 13
Views: 4521

summer's or summers' ? sorry about this.
by Minstrel
Tue May 01, 2007 10:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: death of a tailor's cutter
Replies: 11
Views: 2945

Cheers Cameron. The dreaded apostophe! sorted. Am leaning toward agreement on last verse. Not entirely sure I want to get rid completely though. I do agree the 'stove yourself in' would probably stand better without repetion. Will consider an alternative verse or lines because I feel the whole thing...
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 30, 2007 9:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Japan!!
Replies: 9
Views: 1984

Not really my cup of tea this Bren but I could be reading it wrong. The structure/ rhyme scheme encouraged me to read it fast, almost in rap form. Which it probably shouldn't, and I am influenced. Perhaps by the picture. That being your cause, its not fast enough. Without beating about the bush, wit...
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 30, 2007 8:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Leitmotiven
Replies: 6
Views: 1659

Well, I've read this a few times. Partly because I like the language, in a physical sense, but mostly because I know there is a relevance to be found. Know because the poem says so. I'm thinking Nazi Germany but since Kims interpretation am looking for correlations between the two! uncomfortably, I ...
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 30, 2007 8:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: death of a tailor's cutter
Replies: 11
Views: 2945

death of a tailor's cutter

The eiderdown slips Your dressing-gown drips from the flesh of the sea. And a thousand silver scissors snip the flesh from out the sea. From the highway, a side road scoops out the hill, loops around the hill Drops down beneath a still brimming sea, a grey and brimming sea. Where you drove between h...
by Minstrel
Sat Apr 28, 2007 9:18 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Love's Loss is a Poem's Gain
Replies: 6
Views: 2034

Good stuff Arunansu. Very quaint and quite clever the way you've weaved a picture of yourself writing the poem whilst interpreting the 'action'. Really good. Also liked the tumbling use of language in this, which mirrors the tumbling out of love, specifically relevant to the way birds fall out. Only...
by Minstrel
Sun Apr 22, 2007 7:13 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pictures When We Were Fashionable (Formerly Shellsuits)
Replies: 10
Views: 2513

After re-reading, the 'verdant' in skull reference (which I assumed was space helmet) and verdant being part of the reflection, refered more to the picture of Harrison Schmidt, where apparently hedges and greenery could be seen. aka: 'did we really land on the moon'? bollocks. Which doesn't matter a...
by Minstrel
Sun Apr 22, 2007 6:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pictures When We Were Fashionable (Formerly Shellsuits)
Replies: 10
Views: 2513

Hiya Wab.

I could be wrong but I'm assuming this is about the photograph Neil Armstrong took of Buzz Aldrin during the moon landing.

If so its a nice little commentary on the passing of time/ memory and, for them personally, youth.

If not, I'm stumped.

Minst.
by Minstrel
Sat Apr 21, 2007 12:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Kurukshetra
Replies: 13
Views: 2492

Great architectural picture though. Is he looking in a mirror?...I reckon in an ideal world that arrow would come back to pierce him.
by Minstrel
Thu Apr 19, 2007 11:05 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Kurukshetra
Replies: 13
Views: 2492

This could be shortend, but the nuances are not mine.

Bravo
by Minstrel
Thu Apr 19, 2007 8:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Solar System
Replies: 16
Views: 3400

Hiya Cam. Liked the characterization of the star and the planets. Also the haikus in stanzas which seemed to echo the isolation of each body. One or two sticking points which can perhaps be resolved by mixing/ matching the educational/ observational a little more evenly. Liked the Jupiter one a lot....
by Minstrel
Sun Apr 15, 2007 10:13 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: phonetic reduction
Replies: 15
Views: 4275

It takes a large word, and then shortens it, while maintaining it's phonetic root. This process can carry on as long as the word allows, but I only did it twice.

Onomatopoeia
Honour
on

Bollocks!.

Is this a device anyone has seen before? Does it have a name?


Bullshit.
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 09, 2007 9:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Colours Of Rainbow
Replies: 6
Views: 2043

As an afterthought: http://poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?t=4521 Look at comments, particularly Emily Dickinson comment. Intriguing considering the only correlation between the two poems is the theme. Also interesting you too, ended with death. Is this all sub-concious memory entanglement or ...
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 09, 2007 8:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Colours Of Rainbow
Replies: 6
Views: 2043

Only criticism: 'Pieces of purple has been lost into blues' Perhaps: Pieces of purple had/ or have been lost into blues. Or maybe (to mind better): A piece of purple has been lost into blues. Otherwise none, and I love the way you hold back on mentioning rainbow until end of first stanza, and the wa...
by Minstrel
Sun Apr 08, 2007 12:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Irish Cycle: 3: Maureen Rua
Replies: 5
Views: 1399

'Them lands beyond belong to strangers now' for me was a hook Bren, and set a look forward from the past scene onward. I enjoyed this poem regardless of its repetetive words and perhaps what could be seen as a sentimental sojourn in to the historic and uncelebrated beauty of strong women. I would've...
by Minstrel
Sat Apr 07, 2007 11:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In the desert
Replies: 11
Views: 2944

Lia

This is certainly a different direction from your previous poems and I like it. You have transposed your skill at line breaks too.

Unlike Emuse I thought the last lines a bit telly. It could be the dialogue.

Minst.
by Minstrel
Sat Apr 07, 2007 10:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: One night to be confused
Replies: 3
Views: 938

One night to be confused

I am a disconnected plug, fumbled and stabbed into a blackened socket. A sprocket with broken teeth grinding a shifted gear downhill. Oh the thrill of a forked gesture to me as I pass and spill my guts. The V, to me, is some-kind of recognition for my moments of clarity. Sweet charity I cherish. Rel...
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 02, 2007 9:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: desolée
Replies: 3
Views: 1384

This is boring tfor. It says nothing, does nothing...the only high point was
'the room is filled with even more grey'.
If its a cry for help, then join the multitude and not a poetry forum. If not, then try to say more within the structure. If indeed structure is your intent.

Get your shit out.
by Minstrel
Mon Apr 02, 2007 8:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: A mere half person I am not
Replies: 7
Views: 2411

Hello Gypsy Cake and welcome. On reading first stanza I groaned because I thought you were going all preachy and apart from that I absolutely disagreed with the sentiment. Then on reading second stanza I thought, oh, the poet recognizes the stigma! In contrast to the first. Good. Was completely paci...
by Minstrel
Thu Mar 29, 2007 9:01 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: The Battle of Hastings - Marriot Edgar
Replies: 3
Views: 3115

The Runcorn Ferry by same. On the banks of the Mersey, o'er on Cheshire side, Lies Runcorn that's best known to fame By Transporter Bridge as takes folks over t'stream, Or else brings them back across same. In days afore Transporter Bridge were put up, A ferryboat lay in the slip, And old Ted the bo...
by Minstrel
Tue Mar 27, 2007 10:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Irish Cycle : 4: Joe McInerney
Replies: 19
Views: 3061

Aye, a good poem Brendan and flows as well as ever. Theme is secondary to your tale telling skill. A craft spun yarn. Not as up on history as your good self, always been more of a head down workin' man but enjoy a well told truth. Ireland is indeed a magical landscape, untouched surprisingly in its ...
by Minstrel
Sun Mar 18, 2007 5:04 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: The great libraries
Replies: 0
Views: 1127

The great libraries

On radio 4 this week was at the South Bank Poetry Library.

An interesting listen and a great/ unusual rendition of D.T's 'Death Will Have No Dominion' about half way through.

http://www.bbc.co.uk/radio4/thegreatlib ... pip/05mja/
by Minstrel
Sat Mar 17, 2007 11:14 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Poets’ Graves Blues Train
Replies: 455
Views: 205268

And the methane here is thick,
its a floatin' o'er the bog.
And the methane here is thick lord,
its a floatin' o'er the bog.
Jus' a quiet place for a smoke lord,
now I got an arse like a spit roast hog....