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I counted those toothpicks and there are only 7,999,999!

whoop and warf
weft and warp

Like it e

especially when combined as the fabric of the sea.

Cheers to the fallofRome/ Lia and thank's donjuaninhell.

Sorry Geoff. Was referring directly to poem, not poetry section. Unclear.

Cheers.

Good stuff.

Sweet. I forward a motion to scrap beginners section.

perhaps:

I may scribble some lines:

Arise, write, return.
Sir Herbivore, before I
change my royal mind.

Two nice poems here Lu59. Really good. No crits.

Cheers David, Camus and Barrie. David, in the first couple of verses I tried to catch that moment of confused waking, which the partner of a suicide might experience, every morning for a while, and the manic reality setting in. 'Tailor's cutter' Kris sounded like a cargo ship and is an actual proffe...

start a haiku train
Pseud, with 'vegetarian:'
It's a carnival

Just doesn't add up.
Visible divisible
multiplication.

The problem here for me was the big I. Would have prefered you watching the mist disappear, not being it. That said, an interesting possibility. Also had me thumbing through the dictionary in vain. Struggled with the image in penultimate line. That said, a drifty and atmospheric poem. Cheers Minst.

I'll be happy to read your translation of Yr Arwr if you care to post when finished. I have read a translation somewhere but can't remember the source. A worthwhile undertaking.

David.

There is certainly poetic value in the delayed rhyme. Got that first time. Was encouraged to do so.

Should have added that in first crit.

Minst

Beeswing.

Here's the song and the man himself:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-K18xQgDS3U

Absolon's Sword wrote:

sit and lift things up to where they once hung.

I can picture this, an amusing image.

'There's many a fine tune played on an old fiddle'

Welome liv.

Hope you find it useful here.

Minst.

Tis nice to get a feature on me birthday (they say 40 is the new 30).

Cheers guys.

I reckon Barrie and A.S are busy accumulating a mass of new material with which they will bombard us under a pretence of inspiration.

Too many good lines to mention. I've read this over and over in an attempt to stride the great divide. Trouble is, I can niether be objective or involved because I know too little of either character and am a raging cynic where personal observation is involved. Will, however, continue to read becaus...

Camus said. Primarily the message of how we view people, first impressions etc. Which is true, and emphazised by second stanza. A little shallow I thought, yet understand the problem becomes ultimately more difficult when learning a new language. I thought you very English, which I know will annoy y...

Nice little excerpt. A mood poem.

I like the tangible introduction and the scene set. Reminds me of holidays in warmer climes.
Nice repetition and rhyme.

Uncertain about 'Try. Try.'

Minst.

Cam, I've always been fascinated by the story of Hedd Wynn (Welsh for 'white peace') real name Ellis Evans, and the fact he was awarded the 'Bardic Chair' posthumously after he was killed in WW1. The chair was draped in black at the eisteddfod whilst his winning poem 'The Hero' was read out. A humbl...

Kim

I've often thought of Ginger Beer as typically english.

http://www.gastronomydomine.com/2005/12 ... -beer.html

Yes, congrats Cam/ Nic.

My job is probably about as far away from poetry as I could get and this place is a kind of refuge for me. A great source of inspiration and encouragement. As David says, a good thing is being done and all the work is appreciated.

Cheers all.

Nice one Cam.

I may even get asked to speak.........on 'The relevance and correct use of the apostrophe in modern poetry.'

Did you not wangle any free tickets?


Minst.

This is great kj

For the reason that the Heaney line has stuck in my head:

' the refigerator whinnied into silence '

Very few people know what that means, in 50 years no-one will know, unless its been recorded. A manic sound.

You did a good job here.