Poetry Forum

Much prefer original. Couldn't you have 'silting sand'?

Without fiddling with it.

Evocative.


Minst.

old mans genitals
swing like a hung man on a
sunny afternoon

I like 'Slip Jigs & Reels' but can't find it, so here's ' Ramblin' Comber' :

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MsN27RJz4fo&NR=1

My thoughts are with you, and your family. Hold up lass.

David.

Larry Adler/ Itzhak Perlman: (ignore pretentious introduction) http://youtube.com/watch?v=RXXBdCYr5Bc

Henry Allen: (can't find Dave Van Ronk version, but this'll do) http://youtube.com/watch?v=xQwXTJDSkyE

UK. Silence Is Golden- The Tremeloes
US. Groovin'- The Young Rascals
Oz. This Is My Song- Petula Clarke and...wait for it, This Is My Song- Harry Secombe (both versions of the song were at No.1).........I love Australia.

are hard ones to break,
the crabs, said the seagull to
the thrush, snail in beak

Indeed a happy new year and merry christmas one and all. Incidentally, was winter solstice on 23rd, full moon too...so longer daylight hours to look forward to!
The moon, you gotta love it!

Lone Wolf.

Three nice scenes. Unsure of how they connect though, perhaps they aren't meant to. I agree with Gareth re. final lines, read very much like a quick finish. Didn't mind rhyme scheme, has a 'stuck inside of mobile' vibe.

Minst.

Cam, what did you think of the gig?

I went to see them last night at Manc. Academy. He is truly an accomplished Latin-style guitarist but thought her percussion guitar lifted the whole thing into something even greater. Of course, their interaction is spot on.

I think they are excellent.

The Great Escape:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=YA2h9PrIUxs&feature=related

Bullets:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=AI1NgFYJCN4&feature=related

Just a couple of vids caught my eye. Enjoy?

Ma'll sure fire, home cook dam fool sin.
So lost ma, don't know where to begin
Ma'll sure fire, home cook dam fool sin.
Am so lost ma, sure don't know where I begin.
Guess I'll head back home ma,
Try an' start all over agin.

In for a penny.

It's a noisy place!
Ha! but dab your soul, it's brill.
't' but don't flounder.

It's a yellow submarine babe,
keeps goin' whoop whoop in my brain.
It's a yeller submarine babe,
keeps goin' Whoop Whoop in ma brain.
Since ah popped them yeller pills babe,
don't think ah'll be the same again.

Catch the moon in her flight
To the dark and receiving dead
Catch the moon in her flight yeah
To the dark and receiving dead
Got the sun in my eyes lord
And a pocket full o' lead

I get the impression it's a kind of 'be prepared' this time for the next form of invader? be it physical or market driven. i.e The chinese rise to power. Could be wrong. I do like the use of dialect. Although anyone unfamiliar with it would struggle. Fortunately I've got a glossary in the back of a ...

I'll second that.

and yes, the poem on the link is the one I was thinking of.

Nice one.

This is funny. Really funny.

I can't honestly say that I've heard shadows like memories used as a simile before, let alone be classed as cliche. I have to say, neither have I. Initially I thought I must have, because it seems like such an obvious simile. Or even 'memories like shadows'. Yet can't recall where I might have hear...

Select Samaritan. How often can one or two lines make a poem? A brief journey into the black woods, weaving around dense and spindly trees, wading through ferns, tangly clusters of unnamed bush and I'm there. A real pivot to the poem. You've done well with those off-cuts. Sure, 'spindly trees' I've ...

Now it could just be your style, but I'm almost sure I've read this, or something like it before. To me, it speaks of the decline of urban parkland. The Victorian kind, with bandstands (and bands) and bowling greens and fountained ponds. Most of which are now a general dereliction and neglect by loc...

Bren.

Another seamless, humorous in places and flowing piece. Difficult to criticise because it's in your own definitive style. All I can say is that it's interesting, enjoyable and held my attention, like a nosey neighbour, throughout.

Cheers.

Thanks Geoff. I've changed the punctuation on this so many times that according to the infinite monkey theorem, I've probably written the complete works of William Shakespeare in morse code. Of course, you are right about comma after 'pour'. So it's back in. Brilliant plumber. lol. Had to raise my g...

Kris. It's more a case of not being able to finish poems. I tend to lose the thread somewhere in the middle. I've got a stack of unfinished stuff. The CAPS question. I suppose it's a bad habit, formed by reading a lot of published stuff, especially pre 1960's, therefore it doesn't trouble me in read...