Poetry Forum

What I find disappointing about the poem Is your use of, mistress, she, she’s, her, whore, as women are the down fall, They are the names of anger, frustration, its bent speak, I would have use many others words Than woman’s names for me that’s what stood out for me. Joy twomooms Thank you for your...

Thank you all for your crit, well thankyou Dante,everyone else seems to be in your awe. I am a poet who does not want to be constrained by punctuation. The capitalisation was an accident of using microsoft word, I appreciate your comments and will take on board the advice you have given. I will not ...

My mistress visits me every night Intoxicating wiles weave strange delight Seductive spirit that salves all scars She leaves me in gutters staring at stars She takes my will and thins my blood Alters mood for bad or good She clouds my head and dims my sight Her addiction feeds my lonely night Powerl...

I enjoyed this piece. I am a fan of the repetition and feel it drives the poem. I especially love the personification and the idea of the bird being a people watcher a wonderful inversion. as for semi colons I have never been a slave to punctuation it can become an obssession that stifles the creati...

Well done Zoot. I may be biased as this is just the style of poetry that I love, but I enjoyed this piece. The languge could have been a little stronger but the meaning of the poem is easily conveyed and the emotion is there to see. my only criticism is that the ending sort of fizzles out, the subtl...