Search found 10 matches
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 12:07 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Manifesto
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2329
Nice one dw. This has a detached, zen-like quality. Yep. Phil JAckson will be passing this out to Kobe and the rest of the Lakers this year in training camp, and although it's good, it won't be good enough. Phoenix will still win the Pacific. My only real niggle is that the ending is anti-climactic...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 11:53 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Rights of Passage
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2671
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 11:42 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tule Fog
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1647
I've never known quite how to spell the Tule part of fog. Honestly, I'm not sure either. Word liked it OK, and if it's good enough for Mr. Gates, it's good enough for me. Tulle? Tuly? Toolee? 2Le? Could do with a bit of shrinkage though, methinks. Agreed. Any suggestions as to where? the only weak ...
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 12:36 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tule Fog
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1647
Tule Fog
We five are riding in an eighty-seven Toyota. This squat car will carry us up out of the lowland fields south-west of Bakersfield, up, High Up to the bluffs and Bakersfield College. But the tulle fog has set in, just higher than our Corolla and thicker than chili at a Baptist pot-luck. We creep alon...
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 12:31 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Silent Communication (Revised)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1625
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 12:06 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Back to school
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1696
- Thu Jul 21, 2005 10:56 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: When viewed from a distance.
- Replies: 18
- Views: 4280
Good detective work, sir. Um, sir? I don't have any of that other stuff you were asking for, and I won't get paid untill the 30th, but I do have some Black Muscat Blush. Would you like that in a panda shot glass, sir? BTW, do I talk so much about Tad that you recognize his characters names on sight ...
- Thu Jul 21, 2005 6:06 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: When viewed from a distance.
- Replies: 18
- Views: 4280
- Thu Jul 21, 2005 5:23 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Dancing with Dylan
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1746
This one is fun. The sound plays in unexpected places and the rhythm sway like Bobby dances. That and all of the puns keep making me smile. If I have any advise it’s to get rid of the last two stanzas entirely. Poems don’t need plot (although, I already know you can’t resist putting one in), and thi...
- Wed Jul 20, 2005 6:40 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: When viewed from a distance.
- Replies: 18
- Views: 4280
This is as much question as critique, but why the use of center justification? Is this your habitual form, or is there some aspect of the piece you are drawing out. To me it makes the poem feel silly and amateurish, whereas the character herself is not silly at all. As far as I know the only success...