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- Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:18 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Wasted
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1155
Re: Wasted
Yup, interesting! I like reading these......
- Mon Dec 05, 2011 1:17 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Of Owls and Apple Trees
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1953
Re: Of Owls and Apple Trees
thanks Suzanne!
Thanks for posting this John I didn't get round to it and it's nice to see it here!
Thanks for posting this John I didn't get round to it and it's nice to see it here!
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 4:22 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hello
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3436
Re: Hello
Nice to meet you GiantR! Nice name.
Megan
Megan
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 11:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1919
Re: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inert
Thanks Mic. It was surprisingly easy to get out of the house, which doesn't then live up to the notion of its "grip", making the rest of the poem a bit of an afterthought perhaps.
I'll change the collective frostbite.
I'll change the collective frostbite.
Definitely find myself posting less developed things these days.Mic wrote:risks
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:29 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Back Woods
- Replies: 22
- Views: 4628
Re: Back Woods
Enjoying this Ben...... The wintry poems are upon us. I particularly like your sentence structures in the first and final stanzas. These two lines in my opinion are weaker than the rest: as poplars screech and crack beneath the weight. and Go ask the lake for food that we may eat, Lacking in complex...
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:18 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1919
How to release your house from the grip of daytime inertia,
v3 Open the drawer, inside are cable ties used for flowers at pedestrian crossings. Hit the mattress with a plank to release a shape from the hollow (where he laid out his penis colder than a crowbar his penis that might at any moment release spores.) You have to leave your body slumped there and ge...
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:05 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: (Redrafted) Not Moon Apart
- Replies: 20
- Views: 3746
Re: Two Not Moon Apart
Hi there Antcliff I would have liked to read this without DT's moon cherub face in my mind - all sullen boy-man cheeks - I feel so sentimental about him and I can't work out if I would feel the same about your poem without that reference. "We littles" - oh God, it's so sentimental I love i...
- Thu Dec 01, 2011 9:26 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: PUSHING BUTTONS
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1724
Re: PUSHING TUTOR BUTTONS
What a brilliant effort! I've got Tender Buttons somewhere, to go back to - - But this is heaven to read. Thanks.
- Tue Nov 29, 2011 9:08 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Five days to go
- Replies: 26
- Views: 5336
Re: Five days to go
It's not like we have a polished gem - have you guys not got drafts you could post? But that would be ignoring the Competition aspect of things. That's a suggestion.
- Mon Nov 28, 2011 10:29 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Five days to go
- Replies: 26
- Views: 5336
Re: Five days to go
I can't wait to see the results! Me and John are going to post something aren't we John?
- Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The New Life
- Replies: 14
- Views: 3350
Re: The New Life
the previous unprofitable year cold around my leg like a manacle. That's really Christmas Carol. It adds to the very Christmassey feeling I get from this - the frosty bridge, Narnia - without contradicting Easter somehow. Interesting comment about the combination of prosaic asides with the poetic: ...
- Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:42 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Manoeuvre
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1957
Re: Manoeuvre
Great. thanks. Quite right about the I's, how did I not see that!
No!JohnLott wrote:who are Glen and Matthew Allen - should I know them?
- Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:39 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: icon
- Replies: 15
- Views: 3175
Re: icon
Yes. No. Yes, I was agreeing with you in a way that sounded argumentative, just to add to the confusion. And to pile it on, here goes, re: the couplets, I had a vague understanding that in the classic elegiac couplet the first line is longer than the second. So reversing that symbolised the role rev...
- Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:40 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Manoeuvre
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1957
Re: Manoeuvre
Really? Thanks! Trying to get punct. just right now.
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:17 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Coping
- Replies: 24
- Views: 5091
Re: Coping
Yes! "warn
Adam about believing women"
I think Geoff's got it perfect.
Adam about believing women"
I think Geoff's got it perfect.
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:16 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Bad Co.
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2184
Re: The Bad Co.
Oh my god. Brian you are unbelievable.
I thought maybe you'd been in a breakdancing troupe together in the past though it seemed unlikely.
Good task too!
I thought maybe you'd been in a breakdancing troupe together in the past though it seemed unlikely.
Good task too!
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 9:11 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Small stones
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3536
Re: Small stones
Ah, sorry. The over-excitement was all mine.
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 3:08 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Small stones
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3536
Re: Small stones
Mr Bod.
Nothing is happening when I click on......"right here"
Is it s'posed to?
Nothing is happening when I click on......"right here"
Is it s'posed to?
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 2:30 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Bad Co.
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2184
Re: The Bad Co.
Yes sire. Doesn't it have to be mo' bread then too?
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 2:08 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Coping
- Replies: 24
- Views: 5091
Re: Coping
Hi Ryan - haven't read the whole thread so just to say, I prefer your original version with the shrub - because that slight stumble in the rhythm is welcome for me - like a sob - oh! Talking of which, I'm not enormously keen on the title. I like the poem a lot though by the way. So in your edit you ...
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:58 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Bad Co.
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2184
Re: The Bad Co.
christmas? Do I have to google? really? Is this a tribute to someone? Anyway never mind all the questions. I like it, except I read apostrophes like this: "Mo' bling than kings." as archaic ommissions, because I'm.....British, and then I wonder what Morbling is, but I think I can, you know...
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:52 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Manoeuvre
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1957
Manoeuvre
v2 The first time I asked her out she was in the Leisure Centre with an ex, that’s why she said “Piss off”. But she said it politely, so I studied her in Geography, I made maps. I crossed the river to her house and fell in: she had to lend me her Dad’s clothes. The wedding took place locally, she w...
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 11:22 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: When I was Born
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3817
Re: When I was Born
Who or what are you?! This is definitely fun - lots of surprises - like the Madejski stadium outside Reading gaol...Time-travelling? It's overwritten in places I think - like I love this line: Pleasure was silence, potatoes, leeks and flowers. But I'd prefer it without the 'silence', letting me work...
- Fri Nov 25, 2011 10:58 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: icon
- Replies: 15
- Views: 3175
Re: icon
David - thanks for that. I've re-read it again now myself and can't see how it could be about anything other than the mother/child and sibling relationship treated as archetypes. And having to reject one child that you love to defend another. But again, treated archetypally. And maybe when you treat...
- Sun Nov 20, 2011 9:02 am
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Small stones
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3536
Re: Small stones
I'd like to. January you say?
Do we get a 'funky badge' like they do?
Do we get a 'funky badge' like they do?