Poetry Forum

Cool. I quite liked Suzanne's comment too. I think geriatric is good. And if you were to rework and heap more ambiguity as to where the senility lay (dog/owner), yet with the same matter-of-fact brevity, that would be even more entertaining. Great as it is though. More please!

Also what stuck with me was the, "Mum wanted to chop it up, throw the wood on the fire, but Dad sealed off the chimney when he left." As if wanting to get rid of dead wood, but the very nature of the scenario was the thing that got in the way of that. Dad's departure was what kept kept him...

I like this. Even skimming over the verse, these words deliver a gritty England, familiar, with still the right measure of sentiment. I like the ease of both light and dark. One of my favourite things.