Poetry Forum

I was recently going through my PC doing some cleaning out and I found this. I tried to write it a while back and left it for reason (yup I thought that too :wink: ) Read it and let me know what you people think to it as an idea or a piece of work....As usual it's very rough around the edges and I'm...

Ha ha thanks...

Nice comparison you made there

oh well
Back we go

I dream, of an enchanted place, made from our imagination, where we fly together. Over ever-changing landscapes; our hands held together as we take flight, spreading multi-coloured wings wide. Clouds forever moving, filling the canvas of the sky, we watch as they change shape. forming recognised sha...

Thanks for the comments Lemur,

I appreciate the points you made about the piece.
I shall have another look at it and let you know of what happens to it

My name is Terence Pols, I live in a quiet town in the centre of england. A place referred to as the 'midlands'. I was born, raised and reside in the same town; and I need to get out. Being raised in a town near a city has many advantages I've discovered; you can use the city for what you want and t...

I see you notice the smile spread accross your face as you turn to meet my gaze I watch you see the dance in your step as you flit around the bar I sit here building the courage to speak not knowing the right words to use I meet you sit and laugh and talk with you as the night draws to an end I kiss...

Thanks for the comments ppl

I appreciate the 'sing song' comment caleb, I never really noticed it till now. Hmm maybe a few alterations may be required to give it that polish I was after...

Cheers all

Through the summer I would sit and watch the clouds. See them changing shape, Fluffy, large and small. These things they are so simple, Still they catch our eye. We sit and watch and wonder, As they fill the sky. Making shapes familiar, And few that are unknown. They started as a mist, How mighty th...

Well some people might find that useful to know, hey it could come in handy later on, but for now...ok I will

I don't really rely on people personal opinion about folks, until I spoke with them and got to know em. If he says that then you can either go with it or against it.......???

Maybe some good news on something finally. When I posted the poem here I entered it to qualify for a publication competition, I've made the first stage, I'm waiting to find out if I have gained anything from it :) I'd be happy just winning a publication, but if I win something then, hey it's a drink...

This was something I started a while ago. Any comments would be appreciated :D “You’re setting yourself up for a fall you know?” “I know, but to fall I first have to reach the heights. And from there the view will be so wonderful.” “And the fall?” “Shall be so gracious, for the memory of that beauty...

Gently emerging from the land of slumber, I awaken to the sound of rain; again. The soft hiss as drops hit the leaves, slowly allows me to come round. I lay there and listen; wonder how long it's been raining. I test the air with my foot just in case, and get up. I open the curtains onto a misty gre...

I like google, the fact that they are trying to scan all books that they can get their hands to make an online library kinda sells it for me Im afraid.

If I wasn't looking for opinions I wouldn't have posted Leslie, being able to take criticism is an important ability to have, as it helps you understand the different views of life. Many of the points you make have a validity to you so you're entitled to them. Re-reading the main body of text I'm al...

I googled for poetry forums, I was looking for somewhere that gave feedback rather than just a pat on the head and a good word

Thank you for the many points given. Many of them I didn't realise until they were pointed out to me, I'm a sucker for repeating words in a stanza without noticing that it's already there. Cameron, I'm glad that you read a poem that doesn't feature in the 'norm' for you. Cheers :) Leslie, the rhymin...

Really liked the opening lines to this, especially as the days outside the window seem to echo them. "bubble resurfaced roads" took me back a few years to being a kid on the streets after the trucks had just gone by. It made me laugh remembering that, cheers :) As to "which book....&q...

Caught in an embrace facing the night sky, Between the dusk and the dawn, I hold you. A moment of tenderness caught by the stars, As their journey of life takes them by. The feel of your voice against my neck, Like a kiss of the wind on my soul. The scent of your skin, like the feel of your lips; Ad...

Finally a place where I can post and get feedback relatively quickly. I've been writing poetry and other things for over 10 years now, some of it's ok some of it's not bad...But that's what this forum is for isn't it? To find out what people really think to your work? Anyway time to get on with it a...