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Well done Jane. Very much enjoyed.

All the best Kev

Well done Seth and Mac. I tried the link but was not able to find your poems.
Was keen to have a read.

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Kev

Excellent work Mac. Well done.

Kev

Hi Mac
You're fast becoming a master of these shorter poems.
I picture this scene very clearly and like the addition of Holm oak and levellers lane.

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The natural flow
Interrupted by a dam
Hydroelectric

Have been struggling with this one Jane. But hope to have something soon.

Excellent work Ray. Enjoyed the rhymes

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Well done again Ray.

Kev

Excellent work Ray. Well done.

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Good one Seth. Much enjoyed.
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Well done Mac. Love the poem.
All the best
Kev

That's a cracker Jane.

Kev

Will have a go at this I think.

Love this poem MJ. Lots of interesting and curious images (banana game, the electric scorpion...).

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Three good one's Mac. See what you mean about bite.

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Well done all.

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Well done Tristan.

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Kev

Thanks Mac.
Am working on the rewrite as we speak. See what you mean about myriad, but am struggling to come up with an alternative. Suggestions welcome.

Kev

Thanks all for the encouraging comments.
Ah! I now see what you mean by pre-loading.
Need to change that for sure.

Thanks for all the suggestions. Will ponder over the weekend with a view to posting a revision soon.

All the best
Kev

excellent double Mac. Well done.


Kev

Well done Seth. No I can't beat that. Like Mac I have a couple of non responses. Just goes to show you should never give up hope.


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London drum'n'bass
quite a hot rhythm section
dancing to the beat

Revision 1 George (the breakfast barge) is long since closed. His dark, leviathan hull reflects in the mirror smooth waters of the cold canal. Above him, on the footbridge, revellers ebb and flow, in and out of the numerous bars and restaurants, acclimatising themselves, pre-loaded for the long nig...

There's much to admire here Mark. Some nice rhymes, has good rhythm. Think your getting there, has potential I'd say.

Should that be "the mirror before me instead of my. Just a thought.

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I found the bi, bi-polar bear, bonnie and clyde jekyl and hyde thing very interesting as a metaphor for multiple personalities.
Think Ray hit it on the head really

All the best Kev