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- Sat Aug 20, 2005 10:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Walls of Troy
- Replies: 18
- Views: 5453
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 10:31 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Rights of Passage
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2597
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 10:08 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Aware
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2019
Re: Aware
contemplation of [those] breaking moments <what do you [Did you see me] (I)n the cold rain in the forest did you see me as a vague and ugly ghost(?) (A) monsterous form assumed reprehensible, half crawling with a basketfull of souls [traversing] (that traverse a) clouded downward slope(?) (It)grasp...
- Sat Aug 20, 2005 9:34 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Aware
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2019
Re: Aware
okay 1201 I am gonna tear this poem apart, not because it isn't good, but because it is. 1. Why no periods? Some of these phrases run into each other on and one, and it is difficult to see where I am supposed to stop. 2. Verb tense. I think you could lose some of the 'ing's. I will show a few that ...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 10:15 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Aware
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2019
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:20 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Aware
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2019
Aware
I was not aware I would go through life and find no reason I try forgetting so there will be nothing but consuming emptiness Still contemplation of those breaking moments that became who I am a ghost, glued with a chameleon’s skin that I try shedding, as I try forgetting the litany of failures Recit...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 12:57 am
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: The Question of Time
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5245
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 12:52 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Tuscany
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1723
Re: Tuscany
This starts off so well, has so many wonderful lines, In every frescoed hall The dying moments Of an unknown saint, Canonized in oil on stone. ... Too soon the autumn Dampens the cobbles. ... Though the chalices are tarnished, Denuded by the cameras' flash to chose, just a few that appealed to me a ...
- Fri Aug 19, 2005 12:06 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: semi-permanent
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1536
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 11:31 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Form V Content
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3652
Re: Form V Content
Serious poetry shit now! This is one that has cropped up on Post-a-Poem a couple of times. It seems to me that there are two different situations which are not desirable. (I'm sure some of you will disagree!) 1) Where the poet attempts a tight, complex form like a sonnet for example and as a result...
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 10:35 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Unwritten
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1956
- Thu Aug 18, 2005 10:16 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Walls of Troy
- Replies: 18
- Views: 5453
Re: Crumbling Troy
Leslie,Leslie wrote:I am crumbling. 'Slowly' is, admittedly, a rather ineffectual word. The easy, even lazy choice, perhaps.
I shall rack my brain (admittedly crumbling) for something more pertinent.
Thanks all. Leslie.
I applaud you.
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 10:48 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Walls of Troy
- Replies: 18
- Views: 5453
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 10:41 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Walls of Troy
- Replies: 18
- Views: 5453
Re: Post poem
Hi Twelveo - the slow process is what I want to portray. What do any readers feel about a slight alteration in the order: 'But here the crumbling citadel succumbs slowly to the one enemy, Time' ? Leslie. Leslie, I realize. What do you think of this: But here, slowly, the crumbling citadel succumbs....
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:50 am
- Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
- Topic: Famous Opening Lines
- Replies: 44
- Views: 25956
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:44 am
- Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
- Topic: Famous Opening Lines
- Replies: 44
- Views: 25956
Re: Famous Opening Lines
The Stranger?cameron wrote:'Mother died today. Or, maybe, yesterday; I can't be sure. The telegram from the Home says: Your mother passed away. Funeral tomorrow. Deep sympathy. Which leaves the matter doubtful; it could have been yesterday.'
(weirdly detached)
The Outsider Albert Camus
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:40 am
- Forum: Prose/Fiction Discussion
- Topic: Was Albert Camus a better goalkeeper than George Orwell?
- Replies: 12
- Views: 8550
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:27 am
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: How did you discover this forum?
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5048
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:11 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: how do you do it (revision)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2132
- Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:02 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The Walls of Troy
- Replies: 18
- Views: 5453