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Thank you very much. This poem means a lot to me but I'm glad someone else liked it too. Looking forward to picking the next featured poem.

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This works really well. You can hear the aggitation building right through each stanza. I love villanelles and thought about trying one last night about OCD as was discussed in another topic yesterday, but I think this covers OCD tendancies much better and really lets you feel what it must be like t...

Thanks for the advice, the final stanza is a little forced you're right. I'll have a look at that and try flipping the "biro blue" around or lose it altogether.

I'd never heard the quote before, but it is very true.

Thanks again,

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I really liked the passages highlighted by camus but think the final stanza is perfect. More so without the punctuation as it has that slight confusion in the middle you so often get with fridge notes. They have to be read completely before you understand due to the way people stop reading when thin...

What a great idea that is pseudonymous. An OCD villanelle would be perfect. Someone should do that.

I loved the line:

"disagreeable teeth; argumentative at best"

it's the best line I've read all day.

This really catches the feeling. It's an absoulte joy to read aloud.

I loved sitting beside you, My desk the front of house, To listen to you touch-type, And double click your mouse. A melody of post-it notes, You made each keystroke rhyme. Each day another opus, Kept in perfect flexitime. Now 9 to 5 is not the same, It’s so quiet without you. All that’s left: your f...

I looked for our love in poetry, But found only rhyme. I searched for your touch in prose, But found only words. Maybe those who understand it, And can put love on a page, Are too busy being lovers, To find the perfect couplet. They know only love, not poetry, Makes "me" rhyme with "y...

i only “know” you sleeping (so seldom) by my side, on yours. i count your secrets (hairs too few) for warmdark, unsleepy hours. would the why of you (because of him) be better, the if of other? but… slowly rising, raising shoulders absolve your (YES)terday. no-one, my forgiven love, will ever wake l...