Poetry Forum

Howdy, Ros! Oooh, in the spirit of comradeship then, we will go with E. Cicily, Esquire. ;) Nah, but really - just plain Cicily does me fine. Thank you for your kind words re. my poem...thought I'd put it forward as a sort of poetic guinea pig, as it were! Been meaning to post my poetic dronings som...

The horizon of this hour shrinks to a full stop. They say that to write, you must have experience, Must shop around - not just in the busy, stop-motion World of words - but in the endless, ever winding, Markets of past, present and future endeavours; Pit-falls, pleasures, and transient weathers. But...

Nice opening; fiercely evocative of something distinctly, poetically season specific.

"wet bodies naked to the waist"

Such an unmistakable image of innocence and sensory nostalgia; I felt like I was there, running the streets in the rain, inhibition-free with the other kids. Well done.

Some intriguing wordchoices here! That said, I think there may be a couple words missing, here: "be industrious rubbing my (?)"

"leaves falling (on?) her body"

"yes girlie I’m rich for temptation"

Nice line, that.

Would be great to see a revised version of this!