Poetry Forum

Hello. I def agree with pseudonymous. I like the simplicity here as well and the fact that we shouldnt take such amazing things for granted. best wishes mj

Hello, I def agree with Rachael. but Im not sure about the two I s together "have I. I remember" but maybe you have a reason. But I quite enjoyed this, consice and to the point with great visuals. best wishes mj

Jacques was the ski instructor fluidly dancing with the snow so we followed this graceful leader with ambiguous English: “To fall is not necessariee.. but you can to playe..” on rickety lifts, our heavy skiis dangling higher and higher hale pieces pelting forward each one stinging my face then melts...

Thanks Kris for your reply and that you like the ending. I will def think about what you have said.I can already see quite a few changes I would like to make and think about. best wishes mj.

Im really likin this, and the thoughs behind it. of course its not the deal in many cases but there are too much of those type of situations doin down. So thank you for the positive view of women. best wishes mj

I was walking along the beach on a Sunday evening searching for chip-chips’ even though they are never here my toes sinking in to the damp, cold sand when I came across a chonch shell. half buried your shiny secret smooth and uninhabited I dreamed of where you have travelled with pale brown sculped ...

HI RP, I like the anger and the boldness of this poem and the clarity. Its great to get emotion or frustration out on paper. The poem is about to burst but I hope you arent. best wishes mj

This might be a bit better- She stands at the bottom Looking upwards The soft white protection surrounding her and there is someone else with her too. the journey seemed naive at first but time urged on and The atmosphere suddenly turned the wind became iced and piece by piece the protection blew aw...

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Thanks seeks for your reply. Im glad that you found something positive. Well, I guess it turned out quite vague because I deliberately try not to be too obvious. I have a problem with this sometimes. I will have to try shorten and simplify it maybe and just get the essence with more honesty. But it ...

She stands at the bottom Looking upwards at the towering steepness Defiantly she begins, padded and shielded The soft white protection surrounding her Full of vitality she feels ready because there is someone else with her too. the journey seemed naive at first but time urged on and The atmosphere s...

Really enjoyed this. I esp love the first verse. short and sweet. mj

your speaking jamaican though...

tanks tanks! Big up

Thanks Camus, Your so right, It is fun for me to read, its a bit musical but it also might be cliche in some parts, not too sure. best wishes - mj

I agree that this poem was quite abstract and intresting. I like that. best wishes - mj (Maybe the poem should just be titled - water loss?)

I really enjoyed reading this, beautiful imagery and flow. best wishes - mj

Open your eyes! Welcome to de parade of prides cook-up to sell causin smoke ta rise as whisle an horn blowin from all sides Speakers boomin Plenty drinkin Heat wit dust and smell consumin Truck after truck comin roun de corna sexy gyal sey "meh name ent 'dahlin' mista is Laura" Revelers wi...

Thanks Caleb for your comments. It great to get positive feedback and constructive views , gives me something to think about. best wishes mj.

yeah, I can see why people might see him as a bit of a light weight although he has some intresting views on politics, racism for example. I think hes great because he is not afraid to be free, childlike and fun.

James Blunt, love him. My friend said that he lacks an edge beacuse he is a mums and dads fav. Any thoughts?

again-thats your opinion.But I absolutely do not mind constructive crit so is cool.

Brilliant! he is a london based Jamaican Poet BENJAMIN ZEPHANIAH Vegan Steven (from 'A Little Book of Vegan Poems') There was a young vegan Called Steven, Who just would not kill for no reason, This kid would not eat No cheese or no meat And he hated the foxhunting season. Eat Your Words (from 'A li...

ha right.