Poetry Forum

To David.
Just to shine a light on the meaning for you,
the 'I knew time' part is a reference to Dean Moriarty.

These are all good thoughts, thanks. I think I will probably give it a few tweaks as it wasn't given much thought if I am honest. Oh, and the way its all spaced apart: I don't like it either, I copy & pasted it from my blog & that is just way it came out when I posted it.. You can read more ...

[quote="David"]Well I like it. That may be due in part to what you tell us about the poem's history, but only in part. Sappho was a strange choice of muse, though, wasn't she? Cheers David[/quote David is right, I think, maybe you could try to fit the story of how you came to write it in s...

I like it, child-like yet thoughtful. Though I don't believe it is really about a toad! haha, are you the toad?

I took a walk in morning light,

to feel the cold

&

to feel the night.

What I found was,

I knew time.

I knew it well,

and everything was fine.

There is something I like about your writing, can't quite put my finger on it, you have some really good ideas...
do you have a blog or a website where I could read more?
RM

I thought it was cool.
I used to have some mad old neighbours back when I was living a grotty old flat, starving and freezing.
I wish I had written more when I was there.
Good work.
RM

Thanks for the feedback. I can see what you mean when I look at it. I never really think about the forms and rhyming schemes and what have you.. I pound them out on an old typewriter as one conscious thought & don't stop typing until I get a feeling it is finished. May sound a bit careless, I kn...

You are the breath and the beat of me, The eat and the sleep of me. I thought that was a very nice thought, especially the second line. The two following lines (and this is just my opinion) are a little predictable and lacking the vision you have captured in the first two lines, They work fine! that...

I enjoyed this.

I began to tell you of nonsensical dreams
Where yesterdays myths would sing

really nice.

The diamonds are gone & the light is now blue, and the curtains are closed now & blocking my view of the painkiller nights, old blue harvest moon. Those old tom cat missions & the filling of shoes. Understand, command & blake(the grain of sand) The remanence of visions once held in t...