Poetry Forum

he knows how handsome she makes even the dullest of trees. I love the way that love can make even something as exquisite as a tree seem dull. This poem is a wonderfully fitting tribute to love, to poetry, and to Mrs Nash (who always quotes very clever things...) That last line made the poem for me, ...

know your enemy
my own is technology
hence the long silence

terriblefish. Can I call you Wanda? Shapcott and Agard? Did they have the ironmongers in Egghill Lane in the 60's? Not quite sure what you mean by this - 'you lyin' little I '. Is that an L or an I or what?. Well helloooo! Call me Wanda if you will - I 've been called worse, and I ain't divulgin' m...

Thought it was something tò that effect, Tom I had hoped to infer as much myself with the word 'little' but penises is to the point enough! No mince here.

Brilliant.
We should have a pint.

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Hey, Tom! I really enjoyed it! I felt that perhaps the end was a little undeveloped, as a couple of folk said, but it still really works. I felt the message was that 'big guns don't turn little men into heroes" , or something tò that effect ; hence the Freud bombshell (no pun intended) at the e...

Cheers,boys. Nice one.
Peter - peace man. Gefählt mir gut.
David - there's a snake in my boots.

Lovely...hmmmmmm. Bless you.

Oh my word, raymiller (Bentley?!) this is absolutely brilliant, imho. I was half expecting something somewhere in the region of Shapcott (default reaction - she was my morning read) and upon beginning to digest it , Agard - but this piece so came into its own regards rhythm and originality! Only one...

I disagree with your idea of constructive here. I absolutely and graciously accept that I misinterpreted your crit- hey, I did a similar thing on another of my posts with David! I clearly read these too carelessly, though believe me I do feeĺ ridiculous when I find accolades I wasn't intended! But,a...

Out of interest, Arian - where could one peruse your own poetry? I cannot seem to locate anything recent...anywhere. Shocking.

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Of course you are entitled to your opinion,Peter. However you are too hung up on your own idea that I selected the word only to work it into some kind of form - not true. I chose it at the time, was happy with it at the time, for reasons stated and if that makes me a bad poet here,so be it - but I a...

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texture of the language shifted in all the right places tò keep me engaged, good ictus.

Really enjoyed this, Nicky B ! Cheers.

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Cheers, Steve

Last paragraph - strongly agree, more so than before.

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P.s to those unfamiliar with certain British colloquialisms, verb 'to gas' is to talk,gossip,chat incessantly. Ta sorry tò highjack ur reply with that, Steve..

Ah,now,this is what I wanted :-D something we could all sink our teeth into on terms of 'what is going on here?! Hey Tom! I trust the weekend treats you well,sir. Many thanks as always for time taken to read and offer feedback! The line breaks suck,dude. Hat off and eaten,too. Revision in progress,t...

Thanks, gavin! :-D I do hope the research grant comment is not a reference to my dearth of knowledge :-D I don't want to appear arrogant by using themes I clearly don't understand. I have noticed this happening on the experienced boards. If I express a contradiction or misunderstanding within my wor...

That explains the passion I felt so strongly!

It really comes through. Chin up, Shi , always sanctuary in words ; and here.

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To me,that table was a blazing Bohemia,though he never noticed : to him, it was Kristallnacht. Poetry books took refuge in walls ; crude thought relied solely on moleskine. I was Jewish in that seat - my acceptable items dictated and regimented before me. Miniature debris and limited necessities lit...

door. TV obscured.
It's rigid and digital;
Bored. Off to seek more.

that toll in slow-motion time
with my dead father's clock



Oh, yeeeah...

spinal shivers.

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Said I'd do what I can, J

Some of these ladies just aren't for turning.. te he!

Cheers

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Thanks so much to everyone! Wow,so much feedback! RP, you raise an excellent point, and though my ego wants me to blag the omission of the speech impediment as a transition of innocence or impending clarity, I am not going to as it would be completely dishonest - you've got me. Not sure what to do, ...

I try

And in answer to your rather unrhetorical rhetorical with a further rhetorical in hypothetical : would we really stick around long enough to find out the answer to that,really??

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John... I think David just complemented both of us there

Thanks, David

Thanks, Lovely! But , that's just not how it went down,man...

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R.P may be on to something.
Omit the question altogether - more of a dramatic finish...
What you thinking, Shi?

Wey hey! Cheers, John! If my poem made you laugh then my work here is truly done, ha ha!

Brilliant, that made my day

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I think the last stanza would be grammatically and poetically sounder if you honoured the last clause with its question mark. It falls to pieces without one. Without sounding rude or presumptuous, was this drafted then proof read or blasted out in a fit of afflatus? Either way is awesome but those w...