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I'm going to ignore gavins post as it seems rather pointless passing comment on what was a senseless attack. Thank you to those who did critque and believe me your words will be heeded. I'll try and rewrite this minus the rhyming and also with some less cliched metaphors! Just to state I am also not...

A poem I wrote recently about a break up that happened recently, boo hoo its still a bit flabby but need to put it to bed, so I can write some more uplifting words. Happy new year one and all! Let me hear those words again the ones you said in between the pain. That poured through my heart like rain...

A new little ditty that came to me last night... I spilt some piccalilli by Piccadilly and felt quite silly for a second, before clarity beckoned as I wiped the yellow stain from my car window pane and sighed a sudden sigh of relief and thought to myself in vain. This is the last time I eat sandwich...

Thank you for kind replies, I wanted this poem to be like a snapshot of a summers day with the one you love, it was nice to be welcomed to the forum, I will look to review your poems over the next few days. Hi and Bye!

This has a whimsical tone and its quite playful.

So, I took him to pieces,
Said I'll do what I can.

I think this line is very good and serves to end the poem well with a slightly more optimistic view of men!

Well done!

Buttercup You take me away Golden chins shine on my soul As dewey grass rises through my naked toes Soflty spoken lovers Parading on buttercups and daisies The polka dots of colour on the velvet green lawn while a magnificent yellow hue Beckons from the sun Covering us both We look into each others ...