Search found 11 matches
- Wed Sep 28, 2005 9:55 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: girl in snow
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1767
thanks for the reviews guys and gals like your ideas kj, will bear it in mind point well taken have to say bombadil raises a good point, one i was indeed worried about :) it was all about imagery, sticks picked up on what i was trying to convey, i think my head was on that kinda thought train when i...
- Mon Sep 26, 2005 8:59 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Waking with leaves
- Replies: 11
- Views: 3361
i thought this poem had some really powerful undertones and an accomplished and natural use of symbology and rhyme, however i wasn't all that keen on the third verse i'm afraid, sorry to say derek but i read the poem as being sttronger if the third verse isn't included. please please please know tha...
- Mon Sep 26, 2005 8:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: Minutes
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1944
i think it's about time i reviewed one of yours derek!!! i loved the simplicity of this poem, as was said before we do live in a society obsessed with the passage of time, and i do think it's rather deliciously ironic to see the spirit of this summed up in a poem that takes such a short time to read...
- Sun Sep 25, 2005 6:50 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: girl in snow
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1767
girl in snow
k heres a more contempary attempt for you to mull over
please enjoy, or not, the choice is yours ![Wink ;)](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
stumbling through white
cold fingers
blue eyes
cheeks raw and pink
falling feathers of ice
laying on a fur mantle
warm breath
escaping in clouds
pale lips tainted blue
a girl in snow
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![Wink ;)](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
stumbling through white
cold fingers
blue eyes
cheeks raw and pink
falling feathers of ice
laying on a fur mantle
warm breath
escaping in clouds
pale lips tainted blue
a girl in snow
- Wed Sep 21, 2005 9:45 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: the lover
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1703
- Wed Sep 21, 2005 7:30 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: the lover
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1703
the lover
yes there was a muse for this perticular piece, and she truly is the most beautiful woman i have ever beheld enjoy! her beauty took my breath away she woke me with her smile a kiss like i had never felt it lingered for a while she ran her fingers through my hair continued down my spine brought them ...
- Wed Sep 21, 2005 7:20 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: heya im new to this..can u please check out my poems...
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1216
- Mon Sep 19, 2005 9:25 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The sentinal
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1499
- Sat Sep 17, 2005 7:59 pm
- Forum: Poetry Discussion
- Topic: Question.
- Replies: 10
- Views: 6070
- Sat Sep 17, 2005 7:54 pm
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: hey peeps
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1533
hey peeps
just thought i'd introduce myself my names Matt i live in london and i like writing poems, some say i'm not that good but some say i'm fantastic, so i thought i'd get some nice anonymous opinions and see what other people have written as i love to see how other people write and get inspired so hi an...
- Sat Sep 17, 2005 7:48 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: The sentinal
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1499
The sentinal
hi i'd like to know what you guys think of a poem that i am writing at the moment, and i want some constructive criticism please, i would welcome all opinions, still nice comments are also appreciated :oops: the watchman sat upon the shore and gazed into the sky seated on his weathered throne he wat...