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Ok, thanks for all the crit guys. Basically it's an extended metaphor for the menstrual cycle, seeing that the moon is symbolic to fertility and this cycle, this is where the idea is from. I was also studying a mythology unit at the time, so I got into the kind of ideals of Mother Earth and the role...

Btw I do know I need to write some reviews for other people's work because I have not posted on here for a while and its like nearly for 4am, So I will not go to bed and write some the next time I login.

Seed Moon - This is a poem I wrote for my uni portfolio for this term, lucky for me my lecturers liked it and I passed my year yay! I really enjoyed writing this and hopefully you should get some idea of what the message or ideas are within the poem. If you dont like it then be honest, all critique ...

Thanks David. I had a look at 'Dover Beach' and I can see where you are coming from. In a sense a do sort of rewrite parts of the poem, I suppose I feel slightly flattered that I'm am experiencing some likeness with a professional poet. Plus I have never read any of Matthew Arnold's work before but ...

This kinda just spiralled out of my mind the other day, I tried writing the 2nd verse to it but personally I find it very difficult. It seems that this 'poem' or collection of words has really stumped me. Please by all means tell me what u think and what I can do with this? Sunken boughs of heavy br...

Thanks to everyone for their comments. Hell yeah the rhyming scheme sucks and the rhythm is distorted. It was a quick poem I wrote in class, for our fairytale and mythology unit. It's great being able to explore the use of myths and magic. The Little Matchgirl I found very interesting because the st...

I wrote this for my folk and myth unit at univiersity. It's a first draft so tell me what you think. (p.s it's a very simple poem) Thanks. Poor Little Matchgirl Never time to play. Selling little boxes of fire. Roaming everyday. Down streets and lanes. Past peasants, princes, ladies and dames. Break...

I started sonnet writing not so long ago and to be fair I havent quite mastered it yet. I enjoy doing it but I do need more practice. This is a sonnet written about death however each line uses a sexual keyword. such as 'climax' or 'sweat'. I know it is not a very concise sonnet because I have not m...

Thanks for all the comments, I'm glad you like it. I redrafted a few times and submitted it in my portfolio for my uni coursework, hopefully it will be good enough.

Yes, it's the uni student, I really liked this poem that I wrote for my autobiography journal, where we were asked to write a timeline and then pick events and produce work on it. So I wrote a poem on a dance I performed when I was sixteen based on Chicago with the song 'All That Jazz' playing in th...

I know I should of kept the list for my progessive journal but I'm not quite sure where I put it. Sorry but the whole list was very random and all contrasted each other. I thought 'tongue' and 'purse' would be more of a challenge.

I love how you mirror yourself to your female subject (I hope), as if she commits to your standards.Tthe use of 'very good' makes me think of a higher male figure, maybe a teacher, or a father or even someone with a military persona. This is a very interesting piece, I would like to see a longer ver...

I'm not sure if I am a beginner or not at poetry. Ive been writing poetry for nearly four years, and I'm currently taking an English and Creative Writing degree so I do write poetry everyday. It's been a while since I posted anything so here goes. This is a poem that I wrote in class the other day. ...

If Bombadil is implying that I have registered because I am a friend who would just praise his work is far from the truth. I just had a mutual understanding about the poem with the writer.

It seems as if I may have offended some of the readers of this piece. I do admit that I look at prose in a very blunt way, however I am very inexperienced and only have been writing and analysing poetry for a year or so. Hopefully I will become more open-minded at university.

Interesting but far far too short. Keep up the work!

This is one of these poems where you have to read at a certain tempo to get the full jist of it. At first I looked at it thinking 'woah, just look at it, no wonder there are no comments already..' However now that I have read it a few times, I become more involved within the piece. You depict a view...

Careless whisper chill my thoughts. The curling wind whisking my sense of urge and passion. Has love engulfed me in this stream of flowing rush? Desire to touch, to trace the outline of intwined shadows. Your soaking breath, your seeping words, leek, leek, bleed, drown me lower, lower, slower toward...

Change and decay....your definately on the right track. It also leads onto consumerism, but I do agree with you that I needs simplifying. Thanks for the comment.

Something quick that I jotted in a cafe today. All comments greatly appreciated. Natural Loss Banks broaden. Hill Fallen. Insects crawling. Devoured prey. Holes Filled. Grey rivers laid. Square reflections. Imitated statues. Wondering eyes. Paper and metal placed in Locked boxes. Paradise lost. Desi...

A wrote this a while back and also made it into a song. This is the first draft before I made it into a song. All comments greatly appreciated. Did you ever think things would turn out like this? Isolated in this igloo village, so many inside yet so empty. The lonely place of perfection. Where is my...

That is an interesting piece, it made me laugh especially the mention about Michael Fish. I hope to see more of your work soon

Thanks for the reply and im loving the twang there, lol. Well at the time I was thinking about love, but now it just makes me wonder even more.

A very quick but interesting poem that I wrote yesterday. All comments are very much appreciated. Can anyone make the perfect circle? Smoothing the bumps and constant hurdles. Sure. It will be better this time. No more, it will be perfect. Words in whatever medium you choose, will not always be true...

Hello, welcome to the forum. Also thank you for your comments on my post, I am very grateful. I would say my favourite poets are Wilfred Owen, Carol Ann Duffy, William Shakespeare and Geoffry Chaucer.