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Superb poem. Quite a long one too! I shall be coming back to savour the latter half of it in a while.

Thanks Ben. Wasn't sure where to post it really. Was reading an anthology of World War 1 poetry last week on the eve of Armistice Day, and was struck by the unusual slant of this.

Thoroughly enjoyed this, Ben. I love how you bring out the restlessness of the place and the narrator's desire to quell its stirrings of yore.

A Private This ploughman dead in battle slept out of doors Many a frozen night, and merrily Answered staid drinkers, good bedmen, and all bores: "At Mrs Greenland's Hawthorn Bush," said he, "I slept." None knew which bush. Above the town, Beyond `The Drover', a hundred spot the ...

Like this a lot. I'm thinking 1st line includes a cliche, drop-dead gorgeous ,not sure if that matters, just an observation. I'm wondering if there's scope here for a bit of trimming: Perhaps, for example in 1st stanza and from the imagination springs the seeds of truth seems to unnecessarily substa...

This is a lovely poem. Wonderful vein of delights throughout: mischievious dad sealing off the chimney, and his likely tardiness in sending the sledge, the unbrushed teeth of welfare day, . . .

I'm thinking a knitting needle would bend rather than snap, but that's a small point and congratulations are always in order to a poet sporting half a pair of a dead dictator's underpants. Coincidentally, about 3 years ago I won Nicolae Ceaușescu's nail scissors at a celebrity despot memorabilia auc...

John Smith's bitter gets me off to sleep, but I'm suspecting some of the harrowing incidences you've been experiencing are a symptom of lager consumption. Ghastly drink! I'm assuming Mythagos is a Greek Island? Never been to that one, but I used to be quite big in the Peloponnese.