Poetry Forum

No offense taken chaps. Nice to be here again....it's been a loooooong time without much inspiration. I was hoping that twoleftfeet might be able to unravel the wool around my true identity, but I've left a crit for him and he hasn't twigged. I'm happy to be Don for the time being. I'm sure someone ...

Wow...didn't realise how sensitive the guys had got on here (I did sign my reply, so I thought that would suffice). The name is Don Speumy, and I'm pleased to meet you. I posted on here a few years back, and got too tied up with all the "rights and wrongs" of it all. I did enjoy the experi...

Thanks so much for the crits. I do agree with the doggy dung comment, also the point about ne'er. With regard to the change of narrator, I suppose I thought the reader would understand the shifting from child to adult, but I'll try to do something about it. With reference to Newton, this is copied f...

Loved the whole poem, especially th use of sibilance (is that the term? spellchecker says not). Also enjoyed in v4, the relaxing use of the letter l (esp. lamp-lit) giving the feeling that all is well, then that final celebration.

There is a house that's filled with common folk who've risen to the limit of their station. They do their best to bother and provoke and blame the opposition on the matters of taxation. I went to see this house when I was young. Our member met us promptly there at 10 He looked at me like I was doggy...

Hey Richard, I really enjoyed the ride of this one. It starts out so light hearted, then crashes into the seriousness of the disease. I prefer the original draft.

in the fallow field
bacterial action caused
decay of the flesh

Well, there's a bird you don't hear of every day. Very clever construction. Found the "peeking, making notes" particularly funny.