Poetry Forum

Sacred yet profane; Faith's fair swain is slain. Truth swells, but in vain. In god’s holy name; Creed’s bewitching claim Endures, but in shame Secret seldom told; Handfuls have its hold, Rest quest for grail’s gold. A relic brewed rare In lush soul laid bare, Heaves dawn from despair. Dusk frails, a...

I like how you juxtaposed some phrases, particularly health (life) and death which is self explanatory but also the blushing sea that adds a serene quality of tranquillity along with the burning sky conveying a sense of calamity or a cosmic cataclysm of some kind perhaps. I wouldn't call the imagery...

hahaha I love the humour and the honest depiction of reality in it, a little too explicit for my liking but very cleverly composed imo.

Hi there. Just a thought, but if you are trying out couplets, it is sometimes a good idea - to avoid the thudding sound - to rhyme on last consonant rather than last consonant + vowel. For example..instead of "cat/hat" you could have "cat/thought". I mention this because it less...

A worthwhile read and inspiration for a beginner like myself

I very much like: Drawn into incessant city lights, having to run I’ve forgotten to stop and gaze at the sun even though one is tempted to ask why the city lights are on when the sun is shining. But I won't ask. It's poetry, after all. But even poetry needs to make some sense (I would argue, not al...

curiosity did kill the cat after all hehe I don't know exactly why, but I liked it's general feel.

The sun arose with me today I don’t remember me again today Just like yesterday or the day before Whether standing, sitting or lying on the floor In the wardrobe, the mask stares eagerly To hide what’s already hidden within me The mirror gives a smile I do not know I have perhaps, polluted my own gl...