Poetry Forum

Oh and i much rather prefer the edited version, it made it easier to focus more on each word of your writing.

I enjoyed the still imagery in your writing and was surprised to find another still so fitting for it.

Thank you Suzanne for taking time to read and comment :). If nothing else I'm glad you felt the poems frantic nature, it's how i feel as a young person growing up and having to constantly make big choices to decide on a path in life. The picture aimed to be a kind of zoomed out version of the paths ...

Stanza 2 by far my favourite. "hair shale grey as Arthurian armour" - captures for me the dignity of the experienced, those who have lived and survived longer than most. Evokes sadness in me but also a glowing pride at those not overcome by everything life can throw at you. I also apprecia...

I didn't understand the concept. Should i be thinking in a certain way for some understanding to dawn on me?

Rushed, Which path? “doesn’t matter, just go!” Clocking past milestones and checkpoints, To boast? I say empty offerings to us. Quick break, look back, Flushed. Change direction, No break, or escape button Only one try, Searching in the immersive scrap yard of mundane and broken algorithmic patterns...