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Much enjoyed Phil. Especially that last line, grinning as angry as a clown. Great.

Many congrats.

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Tristan

Hi Not,

Much enjoyed you proverbs poem. Reminded me a little of a Paul Muldoon poem.

Many congrats to all.

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Tristan

Hi Phil,

Much enjoyed the poems and the photos.

Many congrats!

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Tristan

Just had a poem publish in Atrium. https://atriumpoetry.com/2024/07/05/i-t ... stan-moss/

It was workshopped here. It’s a political one.

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Tristan

Her breath like a noose.
"Didn't you?"

My favourite lines of the poem Not. Excellent.

Enjoyed the whole as well.

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Tristan

Enjoyed Ray, but I’m not sure that any wife of yours would not pick up on the allusion, ‘Not waving, but drowning, …’.

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Tristan

The word ‘dissimulating‘ also gives the reader the freedom to open and link up the image.

Enjoyed this poem.

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Tristan

I suppose they is a difference between a fictional person and one who most of us remember.

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Tristan

Much enjoyed your short Phil. NOON is such a quality venue for short poems. Probably the best.

Many congrats!

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Tristan

Many congrats to Ray, David, Fliss and John. Enjoyed all your poems. Another great edition of Snakeskin from George.

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Tristan

Hi Ray, enjoyed this poem and the irony of the end - worked really well I thought.

It also reads well and I like many parts of the penguin.

No comments for improvement.

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Tristan

Really like this one Phil. Some of your best work I think. Love the sound of ‘into pelagic light’.

Many congrats.

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Tristan

Many congrats Phil. Love the word ‘Mumpsimus’ and how it came into being. Fantastic find.

Thoroughly enjoyed the poem.

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Tristan

Many congrats Phil. The book looks lovely. A well deserved inclusion, I’m sure.

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Tristan

Many congrats John. Much enjoyed.

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Tristan

Hi John,

I really enjoyed this. The imagery is great. The poem made me think of Bruce Chatwin’s ‘Songlines’.

Maybe you slip a little into cliche here: ‘like some thief in the night’.

A very interesting poem. I’ll think more about it.

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Tristan

Hi John, These lines are both excellent and horrifying. Now, the easy hand that plucks the lyre, the drinking cup, the bow, peels Marsyas the way one peels a fruit. I have to admit my ignorance of Marsyas’s and Apollo’s story, but wiki soon put this right. Enjoyed the poem and researching its mythol...

I like the idea that possibly God having a good day and singing somehow set all the planets, galaxies and electrons in motion. Enjoyed the poem John. It has your usual easy readability in terms of fluidity and flow, but not necessarily in terms understanding of meaning.

Nice poem.

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Tristan

Hi John,

I like this poem. I read it out aloud and liked its rhythm. Highlights for me are: ‘from the long / descent to evening’ and ‘a spark /leaps from a cathode’.

Lots more to like, too, of course.

Much enjoyed.

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Tristan

Hi John, When I read this I thought it was a parody, but then I read your comments to Phil and found out it was your reaction to the popularity demotic language in poetry. I fully agree with your viewpoint, but I’m not sure this is the best way of expressing it. Of course, you are right, the registe...

Nicely done David. As others have said, this poem gently sings. Thoroughly enjoyed.

If this poem is written from personal experience, I hope you have recovered.

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Tristan

Pleased you enjoyed it John, and liked that sentence. I can understand why poets enter comps, but for me they are a waste of money when I could be buying a po mag or book. I’ve been reading through the latest edition of Long Poem Magazine and there’s so many interesting things people are doing in po...

Made a contribution yesterday.

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Tristan

Hi Phil, I have to confess that I have entered po comps in the past but not for a long time. Pleased you found it convincing. But as you imply, you’d already come to the pieces conclusions. Hi Fliss, Pleased you enjoyed the piece. Po comps are definitely better when there are no entry fees involved....

Many thanks Mac and Celeb. Many congrats to David, Fliss, Ray and John! Excellent poems all round.

If anyone is interested I’ve had a short essay published in Litter Magazine about poetry competitions (https://www.littermagazine.com/2023/11/ ... oetry.html).

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Tristan