Poetry Forum

Yes. excellent use of profanity there. One did have a good giggle over that. excellent! Ta!

Well anything I was going to say has been said so I'll just say yes it was good and i liked it. Well done!

Hey benjy. I did kind of like it. I think theeand me share a problem posed to us by a woman. I'm clutching at straws really but i did get the impression that you have fallen for someone who is somewhat unattainable. Correct me if I'm wrong. The poem is good. Bear in mind that i am an amateur too so ...

any zoider will do. On the generic stuff at the mo. If you look closely liver shares the same letters as evil and i saw a t shirt somewhere saying it must be punished. Just doing my bit like. Thanks for the advice though. Didn't say much about the rest of it though.

I agree. Your local does sound good. My town is a myriad of themed bars and places you just don't go to unless your constructed of cast iron or you know someone in there who is. An enjoyable read too. Certainly made the ancient art of haiku seem less intimidating to a mere beginner such as myself. G...

A remedy of sorts. Numb the brain of all thoughts. Barring footy and women, possible in the beginning. But as i proceed with the juice of eves weed thought is too much multiply with the dutch. a times table of speech slowly being leeched. drained with every sip abilities soon clipped. Reductions occ...

Thanks david. That was like getting my first bit if feedback on ebay. All warm and fuzzy. You may have guessed i'm not happy at work so if you know anyone whoneeds a chef let me know!

six days a week humble and meek. Do as i'm told quiet, not bold. Bones exposed on fingers and toes. You could do my job!? I could do yours too! Better than you! Forty degrees in my office. Fire, fat and food, are you that good? miserly finance to dance your merry dance. With barely a chance to advan...

This was a giggle. I can only imagine what your colleagues look like! But it does capture the confusion of work well. :lol: I liked the idea of dividing the monkey from the man. We seem to forget all too often that we were all monkeys once and i think that contributes tpo the bedlam that is working ...

Doh! Toast bacon and eggs, not bacon egg and sausages. I did read it a couple of times but i have just had brekky. Have a guess what i had! But toast is good too! Sorry!

How very down to earth you are. Bacon sausage and eggs. Excellent. Love the stuff, and definitely NOT scrambled. But at the same time you managed to keep an air of mystique with the inclusion of the sea. Im guessing the scene is set in a dream. relief for the skeletal structure not to be beaten into...

Your neck long slender and smooth, an introduction, to your face too fair. Tainted with anguish somehow enhanced by loves cruel dance. Pain driven by love, to hurt is to live an explanation perhaps to feel is to be how you hurt me a figure caressed by ambient light a shadow thrown by one bulb endles...

Thanks for the opinions. I was kinda pleased with that one but i have to appreciate your comments. It is true, i tend to write backwards so i see your point, i always thought it showed a better understanding of english and its use but it does kinda dominate the poem. Il try to be little more normal ...

Um well. Sadly I have very little knowledge of poets past and present. Feeling a touch shallow amongst such knowledgable bods but i can say i did like it. I find it difficult to write poetry with such structure as to not rhyme at the end of each line so im impressed by that to start with. It had a g...

Just to set the scene, i sent this to the girl i am trying to woo. Well, not this exactly. I sent her a text message along similar lines, a bit shorter but the conclusion was the same except i didn't say i loved her. She doesn't know that yet so please,NOT A WORD to her ok. But she asked me not to w...

Hello to you all. Having just registered on the strength of the poetry i have read so far i would like to say i am very impressed with what i have seen and i only hope i can come up with something worthy of posting on this site. Iv been writing poetry for a few years but never before have i shared i...