Poetry Forum

Thanks Mac

Thanks Kris

T

Can't say you didn't try Kris.
Does anyone have suggestions for any other forums?


Tony

Enjoyed both pieces. I'd read about the Greenland Shark.-strange to think something nearly as old as Shakespeare is still alive

Tony

Thanks Ryder

Thanks Mac for taking a look and the suggestions
Tony

z

I remember those foolhardy lines
Well done Tony

to bury hoarders
the white bones of the rubbish
are exacavated

Kris

Nice idea. for a poem. Not sure you need "definitely" at the end. Without the word "because" at the start makes the piece infinitely better
Tony

I suppose it does come off a bit like "concept art" but that's not how it's intended. Sometimes objects have their own life which I was trying to get at. Maybe Ill have to Simic it up a bit. Thanks for the response
Tony

Lovely but a bit cliched

T

Maybe its what the poems about- the broken-ness of things. Thanks for claryfying.

Tony

A bold statement which can't be backed up but maybe there are building blocks of poetry? It's an idea anyway.

I wish I could read/understand Japanese. Sadly we are entombed in our own language,

Tony

One butter knife, yellowed and cracked, its handle worn with overuse.(wabi-sabi). Six teaspoons of stainless steel variety, undetermined origin. Three corkscrews that all worked differently. A black pen, mizzled. One metal skewer, carbonised. A handfull of workaday knives and forks of the ordinary k...

Perhaps you're right. Cheers Mac.

x

Thanks ABC

I think haiku is the DNA of poetry

Tony

The idea of poppies as guardian gives a new twist. Something delicate and fragile as a poppy as a bouncer/guardian figure for the dead seems appropriate. The first three stanzas are three lines long then the last two are two. ...? There are a few cliched moments here as well maybe in the syntax as m...

Thanks Mac, and Not for the suggestions and tweaks

Tony

The house had taken a wrong turn in the woods, slumped like a drunk, or maybe fell head first. It doesn’t matter because it went like this. The non existant search party called itself off half an hour before it got dark. And then that was that. Lintel and bark became best friends. Ivy became the wri...

The shadow of "The Smiths" still lingers.

Tony

Kris

nice one, - " as patient as oil"

But then "as broken as a drawer you'll never open"

seems a bit overkill . They are too close together for my liking

enjoyed though

Tony

It seems a bit daft, but I've only contributed to this place. I have looked at Erat. but it's very off-putting for many reasons. Maybe Ill have to get my arse into gear if this place folds..

Tony

You did your best Chris. What a great forum it's been.
T

Thanks Mac