Search found 18 matches
- Sun Feb 01, 2015 9:28 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Lonely Hearts Club
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1148
Re: Lonely Hearts Club
Thank you for your constructive comments.
- Mon Jan 26, 2015 9:10 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Lonely Hearts Club
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1148
Lonely Hearts Club
Lonely Hearts Club Feeling small and lonely. Place is too big, enormous really. Have a mate here but can’t get near him. To be honest, we’ve never met And at this rate not likely to. There are others around But they live on a different level Some are attractive, others repel me. Suppose I should mix...
- Mon Jan 26, 2015 9:04 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Oil....an analogy....stong language...
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1637
Re: Oil....an analogy....stong language...
Quite deep. An insight into how the subculture inhabitants think and reason. Quite a disturbing piece and topical.
- Mon Jan 26, 2015 9:02 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The one before the one
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1166
Re: The one before the one
Nice and simple. Don't follow the "Broadhead" line though. Enjoyed.
- Sun Jan 25, 2015 10:26 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Of DNA
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1222
Re: Of DNA
Thank you gbn for your input.
- Sun Jan 25, 2015 10:23 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Brave New World - Revisited
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1441
Re: Brave New World - Revisited
Thank you Kev and Aleph. Appreciate your input.
- Fri Jan 23, 2015 2:28 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Brave New World - Revisited
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1441
Brave New World - Revisited
Brave New World –Revisited I’m leaving the sea tomorrow, because I think I can. Been here for ages, it’s time for a change. Of course there will be worries and fears, what to eat, the loneliness of being first. But I think I’m well equipped, I have everything I need. If it doesn’t work out I can alw...
- Fri Jan 23, 2015 1:06 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: God and the devil..
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1762
Re: God and the devil..
This is a fun piece.Would the devil be looking down at the world? Found it a little difficult to know who was saying what, the Devil or God. Again, I'm a bit thick. Overall I enjoyed it. Good work.
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 7:34 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Demon Within
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2098
Re: The Demon Within
OK thanks,duly noted.
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 12:34 pm
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
- Topic: I like everything I like about you, like
- Replies: 12
- Views: 4717
Re: I like everything I like about you, like
Really like this. No hidden meanings or subtleties, tells it like it is. This comes from the heart and the style suits the content so well.
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 10:05 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Of DNA
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1222
Of DNA
Of DNA What is in my head; this germ of genius that rises from the masses, unique and deeply welling. From generations gone and yet still here. Perpetuating threads and thoughts, all telling of old genes' intrinsic measure. Each gem, each treasure I will savour. And as the light bursts through with ...
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 9:53 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Old Photographs
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3253
Re: Old Photographs
Yes, very direct. The futility and starkness comes through vividly. I wondered though if some more oblique and subtle references to this difficult period would lend more punch to the story. It's very much in-your-face but perhaps that was your intention. Overall an interesting and enjoyable observat...
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 9:42 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Poems condensed into single lines, with titles!
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3559
Re: Poems condensed into single lines, with titles!
Zany and funny.Is there any connection between each poem or are they just random thoughts?
Maybe the PG tips one is more a one line quip than a poem but overall quite a quirky and fun piece.
Maybe the PG tips one is more a one line quip than a poem but overall quite a quirky and fun piece.
- Thu Jan 22, 2015 8:39 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Demon Within
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2098
Re: The Demon Within
Thank you all for your constructive and accurate crit.I woke up one morning with the idea for this piece in my head and hurriedly wrote it out. The words seemed to have a life of their own and just spilled on to the paper. Never having written anything before (but learning quickly) I can see that id...
- Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:51 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: The Demon Within
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2098
The Demon Within
The Demon Within (Rev 1) I am in a strange land; I do not comprehend. They speak a familiar language but one I can not interpret. I try to join this band. Today I can. Yet further ahead I now know, I go my own way. Has it always been so. Sometimes it seems not. But when I view from here, the black c...
- Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:44 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Perspective
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2035
Re: Perspective
Really like this. I like the flow and reiteration of the ideas. I'm struggling to place who the target is though.Partner, lost love, family member? I felt that if another half dozen lines or so were added to give some closure or finality to the piece,then this would make this an excellent effort. As...
- Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:36 am
- Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
- Topic: Blue-green Algae (was Atmosphere) Revised
- Replies: 21
- Views: 3763
Re: Blue-green Algae (was Atmosphere) Revised
Good content here and the revisions help. Being of a scientific background I can see the message which comes across. One small point: prokaryotes by their definition are unicellullar so there may be a duplication of ideas here.
Still,it's an interesting piece of work. Well done.
Still,it's an interesting piece of work. Well done.
- Wed Jan 21, 2015 11:11 am
- Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
- Topic: Hi all
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2945
Hi all
Just joined, so saying hello to everyone.No formal poetry background but have been writing for a while for my own cathartic purposes. When an idea pops in to mind and I take pen to paper, the words and phrases just seem to spill out with a will of their own. Whether they can be described as poetry r...