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Thanks for the comments and for taking the time to read it everyone. David- I will try and clean up the punctuation a bit. Conflicting thoughts about that faster flowing bit it seems, do you think it would be enough to move vision up a line with all->our, as below? This palette of acrylic muddle Tha...

Little tubes of vivid view Names that conjure colour What real sky is sapphire blue? Natures shades are not cut true But bleed to one another. This palette of acrylic muddle That swirling turns to something new To paint in browns the plainest puddle Careful flecks are lost and flood all Vision with ...

Thank you all!

I really like this, very evocative. I would agree about losing or reworking the last stanza which doesn't feel like the same tone to me. My only other thought was that the sonic sea of possibility through which I’ve thrashed deep into nights feels slightly unnatural in the line break. If through and...

Quite whimsical but I enjoyed my gradual discovery of your intended meaning. Some bits were more effective than others and this:

Myself and others have been preparing for a long time,
Aeons really

I liked.

Hello all, I've been lurking here for just a week or so but I liked the feel of the place so have decided to register and hopefully get involved. I'm in my mid 20s and have been writing poetry fairly consistently for about 6 years, entirely for myself really as no-one else knows I'm writing, but I'd...