Poetry Forum

Very dark, deep and just a little scary. Liked it very much though. :) We all need to learn to face these painful feelings within ourselves whether they be about past, present or fear of future events. I have no idea how to defeat those demons but sharing though poetry is a good start, I believe. :)...

Hope you like the changes I made. Maybe you don't , either way I'd like to know!

Thanks for taking the time to read!

Damn......I'm hungry now, Your wonderful palette of vocabulary had my nose twitching for the scents it expected.

Great work!

Thanks for reading and commenting guys, much appreciated. Your right Kathrine I do feel misunderstood, but don't we all sometimes. :) I see why you may think "from" would make more sense then "of" but the thoughts, words and actions are my own, so "of" sits better with ...

Big changes, let me know what you think please guys. *ORIGINAL* I'm a fugitive of thoughts, a subliminal criminal. Deploring judges in consideration. Dodging reflections of introspection that wish to apprehend and study me, with shady scrutiny. I'm a fugitive of words, a tete-a-tete bandit. An unlaw...

I like rhyme so a great start for me.
I especially liked the last line which gave a feeling of anticipation from the child's perspective, even if they really knew it would never arrive.
Very sad!

Thanks for sharing!

Being a father myself I associated straight away with the first verse of your poem. It brought back memories of when my own children were born and the joy I felt. The second verse gave me pause for thought, as I imagined my own children looking into my face and seeing the same. Very haunting. Thanks...