Poetry Forum

OK, thanks. I will edit it. And I didn't know about "shall" usage restriction. Thank you.

It isn't supposed to have a specific meaning, Katherine. It's symbolic and from a specific experience in my life. Nothing to understand here. Just a story.

Ros wrote: Also, 'it's', with the apostrophe, always means 'it is'. For something belonging to something else, you just need 'its'.

OK, but I didn't get this one. I know that. Why do you mention it? Is it another part you are referring to?

Thank you for your answer. Why do you consider this line fractured? I want you to know that it's allegorical as it is the whole poem.

Thank you for answering. No, it's not a translation. It's only this the authentic. English is not my native language as you very well guessed, but I write only in that. I find it more easy and this language inspires me the most.

Will I build a home? Will I just pass by? I don't seem to know. Neither can decide.. I reached the land that looked a barren one to me. I traveled so far a forgotten place to see. The field was pure like the sky, until a rainbow appeared. It seemed alive like it's first time. What it did want was n...

Flowing down the river, pure water makes its' way to find a brand new passage which will lead to change. The passage may turn it into red if battle happens nearby, thus becoming dead in the change of time. It may meet sweet blue waters which with glory will lead it to the sea. But it can find same ...

cynwulf wrote:No, K, marriage is a clue , but it was the whole tenor of the piece rather than one word or phrase that brough WB to mind.
τα παντα ρ'ει και ουδεν μενει-sorry can't remember the accents.
Regards, C.

Hahaha.. Very nice to meet you!!

Thank you Peter.

Well, you're obviously right to my perspective. This could be a nice story and it would be better if we'd leave it at that, because I took an other closer look and it lacks any kind of melody. You realize it when you read it out loud. It's boring!

Uh, whatever.. Better luck next time..

Would you mind to explain what do you mean by that line? "But this piece depends, so it seems, so heavily on the impenetrable (to me) narrative aspect, that it seems to do completely away with poeticism." Sure. I meant that the poet (you) seems very keen to impart meaning by 'telling a st...

To me the ideas in this have the arcane mythopoietic sweep of some of Blake's prophetic poems, but without the grandiloquence that goes with that genre; apocalyptic material needs heightened language, I feel. My imagination can't grasp the allegory you propose, I can see is something lurking here -...

Nice poem! I like short poems. They encourage me to read them again and again without feeling bored!!

Just press the "Edit" button in the first post of the thread and paste the revision under the original. Did I understood well what you wanted to do? I hope I helped.

Thank you for your answer, Mark. I appreciate it.

Hello! I am glad you answered. There was no significance in writing in italics. It was not my intention to make the meaning obvious or not. If it does, it's alright and if it does not, the same. Though, it has a personal meaning to me and everything is allegoric. But I am sorry if you can't relate y...

When the Valley appeared the Forest was just an idea. The man was happy, endlessly. He was in love with life, turning black to white. It was like playing a game, an attempt to fly away. Everyone was lovely and everything was bright. But it was too much to be completely right. The man fell asleep, c...

I joined the forum some days ago and wanted to say hi!

I'm very glad that I will be around here.

Short and sweet!

I enjoyed it..