Poetry Forum

It sounds like their daddy was much like mine. Lucky children!
I don't want anyone to count me unlucky because of the heartache I felt.
We were blessed - my mother, my brothers and I. x

PS. Pray that it falls out that way for you, though not as prematurely. x

Thank-you David, Antcliff and Julia. I look forward to knowing the people on this forum better. I hope you will not try to spare my blushes with anodyne reviews nor, take offence if I don't 'get' your poetry. I am unversed in the critical appraisal of verse but, I am a lover of the art and wish to l...

I do not have the ability to critique your poem on an academic level. Nevertheless, the sentiments expressed speak to me on a human level.
The man who does not cry ought to be pitied. What kind of backward, soul-destroying childhood must he have had? Crying's not for wimps! x

I don't understand how the bread bin " fetters butter to the chair".
My mother always said "Your innocence is you protection Katherine!". I might be missing something.
Having four older brothers who told me NOWT, was never very helpful!

Fun read though JJ. x

The most painful of subjects.
I think I understand 'short death' but, is it not a coffin for one who had a short life and untimely death?

Daddy... You once looked upon my face - a grainy, grey image. Your heart leapt as you heard my heart, for the first time. I was there, for you to see. You looked up into my mother's face; and your tears flowed like hers. You hugged each other, so happy. For two decades, you loved me. Then, I looked ...

Believe it or not Macavity, I was oblivious to the alliterative quality until you pointed it out!
On a steep learning curve here.
I'm pleased you liked the intro, despite reservations.

Love the feedback JJ. I agree with everything you have said. I'll have a tinker when I have the time.
By the way, this is based on my experience of watching my sister-in-law's dad fly-fishing and the salmon was delicious!

I didn't think the salmon getting its brains bashed out was very poetic!

The pain is palpable! It brought tears to my eyes and they are falling now.
I imagine your response might very well be "Yes, but your tears will dry up soon enough!" and you'd be right.
But, this poem moved me to them.
I'll "Fuck off" now. x

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Pleased you liked it Gbn - Cheers!

He stood knee-deep in the swollen river: shabby bib and braces and old beige shirt, sleeves rolled to the elbow, a battered hat, though, nothing much to look at, when first glanced, this scarecrow transformed and held me entranced. Ephemeral rainbows swept through the air; he captured starlight on a...

The fear of flying, well-expressed.
But, the partner seems fairly blase about the whole thing, if he or she is already half-asleep and their hand's relaxed.
So, perhaps it ought to be "Nothing can save me from myself"?

I don't think I understand this poem. I liked the first stanza, it had a 'carpe diem' quality to it, which resonates with me but, I'm not sure that is what you're getting at. As for 'choice', our lives sprang into existence because of the choice of others and though we may 'choose' to end our life, ...

I know this person very well!
Very funny JJ!

Not much of a critique, I realise. But, I know what I like and I like this.

Hello Mark, this is such a poignant poem.

'The hand has not been taken
Nor the time to tend the seed,' Beautiful! Such heartache at the lack of spouse and children.
The last line too!

I'm sure others can give you a better critical appraisal but, I just love it!

Just a dabbler here; reading and writing poetry, for the sheer pleasure of it. Of course, as in all things (apart from ironing), I'd like to become better. So, please be as harsh as you like about my efforts; I have broad shoulders. I realise, from dipping in here already, that 'I have broad shoulde...